tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post8502647901596160756..comments2023-06-12T05:42:33.003-07:00Comments on Mrs. Dennert's Blog: Persuasive/Convincing SpeechWriting Teacher78http://www.blogger.com/profile/00862586497331858541noreply@blogger.comBlogger86125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-6972829431272097322014-05-27T01:24:31.245-07:002014-05-27T01:24:31.245-07:00I didnt enjoy this speech as much as i origianlly ...I didnt enjoy this speech as much as i origianlly thought. It actually was a big pain setting up everything like where to film, good lighting, and uploading to youtube. I must say though I wasnt as stressed out as i normaly am before a do a speech just becasue if you screw up you can stop filming and start over. All in all i thought that my speech went well although i was really tired when i filmed it, and I felt i made bad eye contact but had good enunciation, and I say so myself i thought i was pretty pursuasive<br /><br />Abbi- I really felt like i learned something while watching you video although I personally didnt connect to it but thats because i have never gone to a tanning salon also you seemed less than enthusiastic about giving this speech. But on the bright side i thought you made good eye contact and your speech was good becasue you added a true personal story to it<br /><br />Cyrus i liked your speech becasue not only were you enthusiastic about bone marrow transplants, but you had good gestures along with a background that wasnt distracting and when you said you be in pain for a couple of days.. isnt that swell i got a nice chuckle out of it<br /><br />Chance i did like your speech mainly becasue i like college football but your eye contact wasnt really great becasue you were looking down most of the time and at the begining of your speech you seemed to be rushing a bit idk might just be me but no lie i jumped when your mic made that loud noise at 1:33 overall i thought it was a good speechAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13289963793176018254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-91339956784053895292014-05-21T12:21:16.183-07:002014-05-21T12:21:16.183-07:00I did a bad job on this speech. I was a little vag...I did a bad job on this speech. I was a little vague on the whole speech but I think i did a good job at the steady pace, decent eye contact and a very good idea. I think I could have done better if I would have done a better time organizing it. I think overall I did fair it wasn't my best speech but it wasn't my worst.<br /><br />Nick- I think your speech was very funny, it seemed like u were high but I don't care it was hilarious.i didn't really care how good or bad you did it was just funny as heck. <br /><br />Chance- You did a great job chance. I like how you did not hesitate as much as many others did. I like who you tied the football theme into this speech. overall I think u did a great job.<br /><br />Brandy- I think you were very nervous when you did this speech because you were hesitant, but hey there is always room for improvement.and over all you did a better job than mine so you know that means something. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07688850182082683609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-80748240865091593112014-05-05T20:31:53.084-07:002014-05-05T20:31:53.084-07:00t seemed as though you really enjoyed giving this ...t seemed as though you really enjoyed giving this speech. There was no imaginary audience, I was in your room. HAHAHA!!!!! GREAT SPEECHAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11799979604118208910noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-82305593151306729422014-05-05T20:29:38.352-07:002014-05-05T20:29:38.352-07:00Chance you seemed very comfortable on the other si...Chance you seemed very comfortable on the other side of my screen. I felt as though we were in class at the time I was listening to your speech. IT WAS FANTASTIC!!!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11799979604118208910noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-28274097082070501272014-05-05T20:27:00.596-07:002014-05-05T20:27:00.596-07:00I liked that your speech was short. Its okay that ...I liked that your speech was short. Its okay that you don't always meet the time limit as long as you get your point across.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11799979604118208910noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-79629611088758946622014-05-05T20:21:10.214-07:002014-05-05T20:21:10.214-07:00Here we go again, another speech. I feel as though...Here we go again, another speech. I feel as though this was one of my better speeches. I liked the fact that I didn't have to be in front of anything but a camera this time. I found myself very relaxed while delivering my speech. I felt as though I could've made better eye contact during my speech. I often found my eyes wandering from the camera. I also found my backdrop very interesting.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11799979604118208910noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-34984372431761595642014-05-05T17:44:20.286-07:002014-05-05T17:44:20.286-07:00Trevor- Your speech was very interesting. You talk...Trevor- Your speech was very interesting. You talking about cellphones and the dangers of texting and not paying attention to what's in front of me makes me think twice before I pull out my phone and text. You had good eye contact, you spoke at a good pace, and you had a few good hand gestures. Overall, I enjoyed watching your speech.<br />Nick- I liked your speech. I loved your introduction, you had great eye contact, good tone, you had very good hand gestures, and I love that you listed a few bible verses. The background was a bit distracting but the speech was great.<br />Chance- You picked a good topic. I loved that you listed a few of the traditions that college football teams do before or during a game. You had a great tone, although you lost your place for a little bit in the beginning. Even though you scratched the microphone with your paper, your speech was good nonetheless.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-90913470666496144742014-05-05T17:34:11.576-07:002014-05-05T17:34:11.576-07:00Megan-
Holy passion meggy! This was definitely m...Megan- <br /><br />Holy passion meggy! This was definitely my favorite speech. I know that this is something that you are very passionate about. I loved all of your examples, such as the diet and the donut and also the bible verse. You had a lot of surprising facts! I had no idea that New Hampshire was the first state to legalize gay marriage and also that 3 out of 10 teen suicides are because of sexual orientation. Your speeches are consistently wonderful. Your eye contact, gestures, and tone of voice were excellent! The only thing I noticed was that you lost your train of thought a few times, but you covered it up and fixed it well! Good job! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-47896103357903917432014-05-05T17:25:21.959-07:002014-05-05T17:25:21.959-07:00Abbi-
I know that this is a topic that you are v...Abbi- <br /><br />I know that this is a topic that you are very well familiar with and connected to. Kim was such a hard loss for you and all of your family, but because of that you actually learned a lot, even enough to save your life! I totally agree that no one should ever visit a tanning bed! You had a lot of good facts and you seemed very calm and collected in your speech. Your pace was a little fast and eye contact was only okay but I think that this was one of your best speeches!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-36851649311865291042014-05-05T17:19:10.191-07:002014-05-05T17:19:10.191-07:00Mady-
I think that you had a really nice intro. ...Mady- <br /><br />I think that you had a really nice intro. It caught my attention and you also you tied in a very sad and personal story.You had really nice eye contact and your voice was very calming. You chose a topic that you are passionate about and are educated on because of your personal connection. All of your points seemed very well written and organized even though your speech was short!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-74096076942662249362014-05-05T12:49:26.319-07:002014-05-05T12:49:26.319-07:00Mady-
Even though your speech did not meet the req...Mady-<br />Even though your speech did not meet the requirment of time ithought in the amount of time you used was still a good amount of time to do your speech in you still got the point across. I do belive the old people need too retake there tests often becuase you never know what could happen. Just like the little girl that was killed old people have slower reactions. So i really strongly agree with your speech and that it was a good topic. You seem very natural and had good eyecontact.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09480870266260964816noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-43596567210117212742014-05-05T12:42:22.252-07:002014-05-05T12:42:22.252-07:00Hailey-
I enjoyed your speech I was actually persu...Hailey-<br />I enjoyed your speech I was actually persuaded by it. I loved all the statistics in it, it helped to presaude me. Your intro made me feel conected. I would say you need to work on more eye contact but other than that i thought it was a well put together speech, and it only took you one time to record it! I envy youAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09480870266260964816noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-73670303576645776652014-05-05T12:33:26.409-07:002014-05-05T12:33:26.409-07:00NIck since this was my first time actually hearing...NIck since this was my first time actually hearing you give a speech, I thought you did a great job! Its times like these especially after hearing your speech that i wish i could play a musical instrument. I really liked your intro. You were natural and knew the right facts for me atleast to be connected.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09480870266260964816noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-82111664600497156842014-05-05T12:24:40.328-07:002014-05-05T12:24:40.328-07:00This speech was a challenge for me! It took me abo...This speech was a challenge for me! It took me about 8 times to finailly get it done all the way through with out laughing or just staring blankly at the camera. I had a rough time trying to make eye contact. I definantly did not make that much eye contact. I also, even though i was sitting i still felt myself swaying. I guess I just naturally do it when im nervous or something. When i watched my video I realized i could of worded som things differently to make them flow better and have it more natural.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09480870266260964816noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-39790547127966228792014-05-05T06:38:14.158-07:002014-05-05T06:38:14.158-07:00I liked your opener, very funny and very corny, (b...I liked your opener, very funny and very corny, (but good.) You seemed to know what you were talking about especially about the amendments. I also liked how you talked about your personal experiences with guns I think it really made you seem more knowledgeable in the topic. You went pretty far over the time limit, but overall I think this was your best speech yet. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03389235490984749083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-83155504694660579752014-05-05T06:35:45.012-07:002014-05-05T06:35:45.012-07:00Brandin- I thought your speech was good, you had s...Brandin- I thought your speech was good, you had some good points. Your background was really distracting, especially when the screen would move and the changing light colors. You had a good pace with your voice, and good enthusiasm and facial expressions. You seem to have a definite opinion on the subject and you picked a good topic!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-35842523415272745372014-05-05T06:35:44.109-07:002014-05-05T06:35:44.109-07:00I struggle with this speech tremendously. I had a ...I struggle with this speech tremendously. I had a hard time making eye contact and just being motivatewd to make it ionteresting and speak like im excied to give it. My background is really dark and it wasn't when I first tested it out so Im not sure why that happened. Alot of what a said didn't flow togather how it did to me when I first wrote it and then watched it. As I look bacvk on it I definetly need to work of speaking to the camera and acting more natural infront of it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-88318843379211055252014-05-05T06:33:29.518-07:002014-05-05T06:33:29.518-07:00Taylor, I thought your speech was great! Your tone...Taylor, I thought your speech was great! Your tone was very even and as you said, very calm. I think it kind of lacked passion because you talked slow and even, however I know you and I are both very passionate about this topic! You had great eye contact, I don't know what your talking about! Your speech was very informative and I learned a lot about bullying psyche that I didn't know! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03389235490984749083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-31260895644367269412014-05-05T06:30:36.607-07:002014-05-05T06:30:36.607-07:00I could tell immediatly that you were not comforta...I could tell immediatly that you were not comfortable and did not enjopy doing this speech. Good professional background. You struggled with eye contact but tried your best to make it. You usually have hand gestures but you didnt have any for this speech. You seem akward for the whole speech and never seem to get comfortable in front of the camera.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-87136681964133613712014-05-05T06:29:48.105-07:002014-05-05T06:29:48.105-07:00Nick, I really liked your speech. You had really g...Nick, I really liked your speech. You had really good natural movement, and you bring a unique twist to speeches. You speak didn't seem completely factual, but still was pretty convincing. I think it would have been better if you would have more than just your head mostly in the picture, but it wasn't terrible either! You seemed to lose track of your thinking every once in a while, but still a very enjoyable speech to listen to!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-53901230497875070182014-05-05T06:28:58.586-07:002014-05-05T06:28:58.586-07:00I really liked your speech Trevor, you related wel...I really liked your speech Trevor, you related well to all of us, because it's safe to say all of us get distracted by our phones... even in speech class (crazy I know.) Your hand gestures were good as always. Only thing I would say is that you say "and now" when your changing topics, nothing wrong with that, you just tend to say it a lot. Overall great speech! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03389235490984749083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-58227558462363925062014-05-05T06:26:02.369-07:002014-05-05T06:26:02.369-07:00I thought that you picked a unique, yet relatable ...I thought that you picked a unique, yet relatable topic for all of us to understand. You did a great job delivering the speech and giving good eye contact. You made the speech feel lie you were talking directly to us. You definitely are becoming a great speaker. Great job! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04279295751887640222noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-25580448601467076372014-05-05T06:25:27.022-07:002014-05-05T06:25:27.022-07:00You seem completely comfortable immediatly and hav...You seem completely comfortable immediatly and have a good intro. I agree with you Trevor people can't go anywhere without there phone and cant be off it for five minutes. Good point with people don't need to be connected 24/7. You carry out good eye contact throughout your speech. You gave me a good laugh with the story of the girl who walked into the open man whole. Smooth and simple comclusion but the video ended before you were done speaking.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-62792603733357327432014-05-05T06:23:12.539-07:002014-05-05T06:23:12.539-07:00Trevor-
I really liked this speech. This speech ma...Trevor-<br />I really liked this speech. This speech made me realize how much i actually depend on my phone everyday. Now i am currently trying to use it less and be more interactive with other people. You brought up very good points and were very convincing, so in conclusion nice job bro!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8766181031976447003.post-6211257408788674042014-05-05T06:20:33.840-07:002014-05-05T06:20:33.840-07:00I think your speech went better than you thought i...I think your speech went better than you thought it went. You had a great topic and I could definitely tell you practiced a few times before filming it. I thought that your background was good and not too distracting for the audience. You made us feel that you were talking directly to us. Great job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04279295751887640222noreply@blogger.com