Wednesday, January 21, 2015

Introduction Speech-January 2015

Please reflect on your first speech by writing one well-written and thought out paragraph. Upper class students should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. 

Things to consider (you do not need to include all of them)

*eye contact
*nervousness
*audience feedback
*preparation (enough? not enough? What will you change for next time?)
*voice (rate, variation)
*gestures
*poise
*confidence level
*introduction and conclusion
*organization


What went well? What do you need to work on? Be as specific as possible. 


Please leave feedback for at least two of your classmates. Feedback should be constructive, original, and well-written. 
Reflection: 20 points
Feedback: 10 points each

70 comments:

  1. I had a lot of fun with my speech. I felt extremely comfortable in front of everyone, and the audience's energy and reactions definitely helped during my speech. However, I think my pace was a little fast the entire time. Also, I did lose my train of thought once right in the middle of my speech which did make me a little nervous, causing me to deviate from my originally planned speech a little more than I had wanted to and causing me to use several filler words. Overall, I think I did well on my first speech and had a lot of fun with it.

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    1. Jon I was kinda jealous of you. You weren't nervous at all, you made good eye contact too. You were going a little too fast, but overall it was a very well done,and funny speech.

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    2. Jon I thought you did a very good job. You were confident and it was obvious that you practiced a decent amount. You did have a pretty fast pace but overall I enjoyed it! Nice job!!

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    3. Well you definitely made a first impression. You had good eye contact, you had good pace, and even though you were discussing a heavier topic you kept it light and conversational. Very well done

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    4. HI JON I think that your speach was great. It really had me enterrained through out the whole entire speach, Which is not easy to do. You were very energetic and was very well organized on what you were going to say. THIS POST WAS SINGED BY STEVEN KELLY

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    5. I was definitely impressed by your first impression speech!! You seemed comfortable, well rehearsed, and like it was all natural and smooth. Nice eye contact too! Overall, very well done!!

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    6. YouTube Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eOJ8gZ_shdk&feature=youtu.be

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  2. I was definitely nervous about my speech. I practiced it a few times but as soon as I got up to the podium I forgot almost everything and my voice was trembling. I don't think my eye contact was too good. I didn't have alot of confidence but I'm hoping thats something that will come with time and more practice. In the middle I blanked and I made some stuff up on the spot and then skipped some other stuff. Overall, I think theres alot of room for improvement and I'm excited for the rest of the semester.

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    1. Although you have room to improve, the fundamentals are there. You had moments in your speech that were very good in terms of eye contact, gestures, etc. Now we just need to work on fine tuning these skills.

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    2. Splendid speech old sport, you seemed bold on your speech and topics which is important. From the audience, I could not tell that you made things up as you went, so you flowed from one topic to another well. Overall, it was well done and enjoyable to listen to.

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    3. I thought you did pretty well, there were plenty of people who were nervous but it was good that you kept pushing through that to get your point across. I liked your introduction and the fact that you talked about something you're passionate about and that it really showed. I agree with Matt that you had good eye contact and hand gestures and the rest will come with time.

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    4. Aaron I thought you did a great job on your first speech although there is slight room for improvement you did seem a little nervous and shaky but overall you had a great first speech and I enjoyed listening to it

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    5. Aaron, I think you had a great first speech. Although it was evident that you were nervous and your eye contact could use some improvement, I'm sure that you will gain some confidence and over come these obstacles with ease given time and effort. I liked that the topic you picked was important to you, and you were passionate about it. Overall, you did a great job.

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  3. First speech of the year is a tough one. You have to make a good first impression and find a topic that you are passionate about, but also you don't want to keep using the same topic throughout the semester. I think the hardest part of this introduction speech was finding the right topic. I need to do some work on finding a good pace and getting rid of filler words, but overall I am very satisfied with this first speech.

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    1. I could see you were really passionate about what you were speaking about. You had good eye contact and even though your pace was a little fast you did really good. You didn't seem nervous at all which told me that you practiced this a lot.

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    2. I think I did really good for my first time. I made good eye contact, and my pace was not too fast either, but my time was two minutes over, which is something I need to improve on. I felt like I lost everybody a bit after a while. I was really nervous too. It's weird because even though I have been acting for three years I get scared whenever I'm in front of a crowd of my peers. I don't know what it is, but overall I guess I'm happy with my speech.

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    3. Peter- Although acting helps, even I'm scared up there. You did well. Your pace and pauses were spot on! Try working on confidence and organization. You seemed passionate and conversational, I just think you had a bit of nerves. Overall good job!

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    4. Peter, I personally thought your speech was great. You made eye contact with everyone, you had a strong voice and I could tell that you were passionate about what you were speaking about. The only critique I have is that I could tell you got a bit nervous towards the end and you went a couple minutes over the set time. Besides that you were golden and we'll all improve our speaking skills as time goes on.

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    5. Bremer, I think you picked a good topic for you're first speech. It was obvious that you had experience public speaking as you had good eye contact, and you were evenly paced. It was also evident how important your dad is to you, and how he impacted your life for the positive. You did have some filler words, but not to many that it was extremely noticeable. Overall, I think you had one of the most impactful speeches of the class.

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    6. Peter, you had a good speech, although you seemed to repeat yourself quite a bit. I am not sure if it was because you were a little disorganized and you lost your place, or whether you were a little nervous. You seemed strong starting your speech and gradually became more nervous using more and more filler words. On a positive note, you had great eye contact and you evenly paced the entire time. Some things to work on but overall a good first speech.

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  5. attempt #4 Steven Kelly is me. I think that this website is broken. My speach was ok bu ti think that i need to work on my eye contact i kept forgeting that I was stairing off into space during the speach and i also kept looking around the room. I also was lacking hand jestures, and I need to work on keeping 1 stedy pace through out the whole speach. Practice is a thing that I need to remember to do other then all of that I think my first speach was not a totaly rekt Speach. Ps this is steven Kelly with a "V" not "PH"

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    1. I enjoyed your speech because it was not an average speech. You got into the speech, despite the fact that you did not do everything perfect you were in the speech and you really made it more than just a speech. You communicated to us in a way where you kept our attention and not just talked dismally. You did a good job on your speech though.

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    2. Steven, I was really impressed by your speech. You could definitely tell you practiced and I liked how it was unique and Individual to you! Your speech had lots of comedy and it was really enjoyable!

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    3. Steve, I found your speech as one of a kind. It told us who Steven is, as an introduction should, but it also gave us a look into your personality. You were light and conversational, and you were very confident and passionate. Your pace was a little fast but overall I loved it!

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    4. Steven, I absolutely loved your speech. You were truly energetic, and above al else your speech spoke to who you truly are and the struggles you face on daily basis. The most interesting part of your speech was how you were not afraid to deviate from your speech. It flowed smoothly and a did fairly good job staying on topic, but you used a lot of filler words. Overall, you had a great first speech, and I look forward to your next one. Hopefully we can film it.

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  6. Peter I think that you were very well organized in your speach you really knew what you were going to say,I was distracted with the findinding out of gogles still on my head right now and forgot what i was saying.OH you seemed to repeat your self quite abit twords the end of your speach. I dont know if that was you having troubles finding an ending or just stressing a point till it was no longer a point but a really thin line, Just one of my thoughts I had that I rememberd I had. THIS ENTER BUTTON WAS SINGED BY STEVEN KELLY'S FACE ENTER



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  7. i thought my speech was good i thought i made goood eye contact, was well prepared, had good volume control my speech could have been a little bit more well organized than it was but overall i thought i did a pretty good job poeple seemed interested and laughed a little which was my goal.

    alex S - i thought your speech was good although you seemed nervous i could see your face was getting red and your hands were shaking a bit, next time have a little bit more confidence in yourself. other than that you made good eye contact, didn't use to much filler words and i also liked your story about how you are adopted it takes guts to talk about that in front of a bunch of people you don't really know to well.

    Jon Farnes- i thought your speech was fun to listen to because you were so energetic and hyper like when you were skipping and hopping around. your dad joke caught everyone off guard though and made things a little awkward but i thought it was a funny joke. overall you had a good speech and im looking forward to more fun speeches in the future.

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  8. Alex Schiller
    In preparation for this speech, I did not quite practice as much as I should of. If you could not tell by my shaky hands I felt nervous. Screwing up in front of people immediately makes me sweat, and then it goes downhill from there. I hope to improve over the semester. Eye contact and gestures personally felt better than my poise and confidence. Overall I felt like I should not be voted off the island.

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    1. I enjoyed listening to your speech. I thought you made good eye contact with everyone and I couldn't tell that you were nervous. It was cool learning that you were adopted and born in Russia. Also don't be too hard on yourself, this was all of our first speeches, hopefully as the semester progresses we'll all grow more comfortable speaking in front of each other and we'll continue to improve.

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    2. Alex I thought your speech was great I did not know that you were from Russia and that's really cool and although you did look nervous i'm pretty sure almost everyone was nervous so overall i would keep you on the island maybe even consider making an alliance if the terms were agreeable

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    3. Good speech man, i thought that you were a bit nervous, but just a bit. You maybe should have slowed down a bit because you could not keep up with your thoughts. Do a little more public speaking or go out to the mall and talk to random people. You need to get more comfortable talking to people.

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    4. Alex, I always enjoy your speeches or charades in History of Drama because they always make me laugh for some reason. You seemed a bit nervous but you definitely seemed to deal with it well. Your eye contact wasn't bad and I would vote you to stay and for PJ to get kicked off. Overall I enjoyed it and I can't wait to see what future speeches hold.

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    6. I thought your speech was good even though you were nervous you just went with the flow and keep talking and I never know you were from Russia that's cool, I also liked the quote where you talked about the peanut butter and jelly sandwich.

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    7. Alex, very interesting speech. Pace was good, eye contact was good, but organization was a little weak. Nothing to major to fix. Overall a good speech.

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  9. Over all I thought that my speech went well. There are some positives and negatives that I can take from what I did. I'll start with the positives. I took the time needed to be prepared to give my speech. I wrote out a manuscript to start with, then had a teacher edit my work. When I felt ready I started to practice with note cards instead. I practiced about 5 times prior to the speech so I felt prepared. I think that my intro and conclusion were fine. What I need to improve on is learning to control my nerves, making better eye contact, and gaining poise and confidence.

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    1. Marissa, I thought you're speech was good and I it was cool you shared something a lot of people probably didn't know about you. You could tell that you were nervous, but a lot of people were and it will get better with more practice. I think the speed and volume you had were big positives though. You seem like you could be a very natural speaker once you get past the nerves.

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    2. Very interesting! You were passionate about what you talked about and it seemed very conversational. A little fast on the pace and a little nervous, but all that comes with practice. Nice job!

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  10. As much as I am a pretty confident person I have always had some trouble with public speaking. That being said, I think it went better than expected. I spoke a little fast and forgot some of the points I was going to make. I think I made good eye contact and tried to focus and gestures because I am not a person who normally "talks with my hands". I also am usually not very good at organizing my thoughts and tend to ramble but I think practicing it about 4 times helped me to keep it clear in what I was trying to say. I am also looking forward to gaining more confidence and think it is cool that our class already seems pretty comfortable with each other.

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    1. Rachel, I loved the passion in your speech and the way you transitioned from A to B so smoothly. You pace was spot on and you weren't afraid to pause. I do agree that gestures were all there and you had good eye contact. Very well done

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    2. Rachel, I appreciated that you're speech took a unique direction with your topic choice. You made it personal and relatable. You were passionate about what you were talking about, and you had lot of confidence in what you were saying. Overall, I think you had a great first speech.

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  11. I thought I did alright on my speech I usually get a lot more nervous than I did but I was still pretty nervous and a little bit shaky. When I practiced the speech was over a minute and a half and being at a minute told me I need to slow down and also i forgot to mention an entire part of the speech but it happens oh well

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    1. Although scraping the line for the time, your speech was straight forward had hard hitting. Even if you where a little speedy, it seemed to me that your confidence was strong. In conclusion it was a strong speech and I am sure you will improve with practice

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    2. I agree with Alex. I liked how you were able to get everything that needed to be said in such a short amount of time.

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    3. Pj, Short and sweet doesn't do your speech justice. It was more short but rich. It was full of who you are and the makeup of your personality, it just didn't take that long to talk about. Part of that might be nerves and practice, but overall you did a great job.

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  12. I think that my speech was ok. Since it was my first speech I was pretty nervous about having to speak in front of a crowd. That’s why I practiced a lot at home in front of my little brother. I thought it was a good speech at first but learned it wasn’t. I did not get a lot of feedback from him but it was all that I had. I feel like there weren’t enough gestures or eye contact etc. First speech is always the first.

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    1. I thought you had a great speech. It had good content and all the other stuff will come in time.

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    2. Danny, I liked how passionate you were about your boarding and I liked how you started with something that was personal and many didn't know about you about your dad. I really felt like it was a smooth transition between the connection of the two and was overall very impressed! Great Job!

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    3. Your speech was a good representation of you. You had passion and good pace. Eye contact was a little weak along with organization, but that will come with time.

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    4. Daniel-son, of all the speeches I feel I could relate the most to yours. Your speech took a more seriousness and formal approach, and because of that your speech was one of the more impactful speeches. Daniel-son, you seemed well prepared, well organized, and you didnt seem to nervous in front of everyone. You talked about a personal topic and how you handled and continue to handle a difficult situation. Your eye contact could use some improvement, but you had good pace overall. Good job, Daniel-son.

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    5. YouTube Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZqH--kt-P0c&feature=youtu.be

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    6. G Money, even though you are that guy, your first speech went pretty well. Talking about what you talked about isnt an easy thing to do. And I think you handled it very well. You stumbled only a few times, and they were hardly noticeable. Overall, good job on your intro speech bud.

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  13. I thought my speech went pretty well. I didn't practice much, and to be honest, I didn't set in stone what my speech was going to one till the day of in class. I mean I had what I thought I was going to do, but decided to go with the story about my dad. Even though I told myself I wouldn't do it on that. Over all I thought it went alright. I would have liked to practice more because I forgot to say a couple things that I really wanted to say.

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    1. John, I really liked how you shared something personal and something not a lot of people knew about you. You seemed confident and passionate about your topic and even though you said you did it in class the day of, you seemed prepared for it and it just had a natural flow. Overall, great job!

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    2. I thought you had your speech will put together and you had good eye contract. I also know that must have been hard to talk about with everyone but it was really touching to tell something so deep that someone would of never know that happened in your life, you very really confident when your speaking I felt.

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    3. John, that shows your natural ability. You masked it well. You were very conversational and powerful. I don't think there was a person in the room that wasn't hanging on your words. Good pace and good eye contact. Very well done first speech

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  14. My speech wasn’t my best. If there was one thing I would go back and change it would be to prepare and practice more. I was so very nervous speaking in front of everyone, especially after arriving late. I know some points I want to focus on improving in the future are displaying poise, confidence, eye contact, and making use of gestures. One positive aspect of my speech was that I shared something personal with the class. I’ve been writing poetry for as long as I can remember and it is a major outlet to me.

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    1. I really enjoyed your poem and it was nice to hear something I didn't know about you!! The poem was beautifully written and I was really moved by it. You didn't seem very confident and set on what you were going to say, but there is for sure room to grow over the semester!

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    2. You have a gift in poetry. From what i heard it comes naturally. Speaking is something that will come with practice! You had good content and organization, just a little under confident. Good job though.

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    3. Liz, I found your speech very interesting. I'm glad you shared this with the class because it did for sure grab my attention. The subject was great, just the confidence I would say was a little lacking, but then again it was for all of us. Awesome speech!

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  15. I was really really nervous for my speech, and felt like it didn't go very smooth at all. I went up there and completely froze. I practiced for a total of 5 times, but even then it didn't seem like enough. I overused the word 'like' and felt really uneasy and unprepared about all of it. I forgot half of what I was going to say and felt like I repeated myself. Overall, I need to work on the complete execution of it all and work on my confidence.

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    1. Claire, your speech was alright overall. You seemed to be more focused on watching the timer than making eye contact. It was obvious you were nervous and uncomfortable. You seemed to have hit your time mark, and than dropped the rest of the speech to be done with it. Overall, you seemed distracted and disorganized, but with effort you can easily improve.

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    2. Claire, I thought you did awesome! Yes, it was not the best speech I have ever heard, but it was your first one and I felt I learned a lot about you. You had my attention the whole time, and i enjoyed what you had to say. The rest will for sure come with practice.

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  16. For my first speech, I felt it could have gone better. I found myself getting lost in what I was saying and forgetting where I was rather than just talking to fill silences in. I practiced about 3-4 times the night before and ended up not saying what I rehearsed. I definitely need to work on eye contact and not doing weird hand gestures. I did talk a bit fast and will definitely be working on pace. Another thing I need to work on is the organization. I felt I was all over the place, but hopefully got the point across. There is a lot more to speeches than I thought.

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    1. Hailey overall your speech went pretty well. You spoke very clearly and got your points across well by not using too many filler words. You use pauses very well and threw in a few hand gestures. You even managed to throw in a few jokes to keep the audience involved. Overall, good start to the year.

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  17. Overall, I think that my first speech went very well. I think that it flowed very well due to good pacing and good pausing. I was a little nervous but that’s because I only practice once, 20 minutes before school. But nonetheless it flowed very well. At the beginning, me hand gestures were a little fidgety, but then I kind of calmed down, and most of the nerves went away. Overall, this speech was a pretty good way to start the semester.

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