Monday, April 25, 2016

Informative Speech

Write one well-written and thought-out paragraph. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upper class students should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. Please specifically comment on your introduction, conclusion, and visual aid. For your introduction--did you cover the four points of a good introduction? Conclusion--solid? Are all three parts included? Visual aid-seamless? Did you read off of it or was it an incorporated part of your speech? 

In addition, you may comment on the following aspects as well: 
  1. Eye Contact
  2. Nervousness
  3. Audience Feedback
  4. Preparation--did you practice enough? Too much?
  5. Speaking Rate (too fast? too slow? too many pauses?)
  6. Gestures (Did you do any?)
  7. Poise and Presence 
  8. Organization
  9. Facial Expressions 
  10. Dressed and groomed?
  11. Outline/Note Cards/Manuscript
  12. Works Cited?

What went well? What do you need to work on for the next speech? Be as specific as possible! 

In addition, leave feedback for at least two students. Feedback should be specific and original

61 comments:

  1. I think my speech was OK. The topic did not seem to grab peoples attention like I thought it would. I unfortunately did not think about the light issue so that made it a little bit awkward. I think my eye contact did better this time around but I feel that my rhythm was thrown off a little bit when I saw the amount of time that I was going. I felt that I rushed the ending and I started talking too fast. My attempts to make some jokes inside my speech kind of backfired and created bad transitions. I felt that my tone and volume was adequate, I hope that my next speech goes better.

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    1. Zack, don't be so hard on yourself. I know that you are naturally really good at speaking, and I actually thought your speech was really good. You seemed really professional. I also thought your story about collecting money from the washing machine was funny. Also, I didn't think you were fast paced or had bad transitions. And I didn't think your speech was long or wasting time. Great job!

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    2. Your speech was really interesting to listen too! Your topic seemed like it was easy to talk about because it was based off of a personal experience and something you are passionate about. The only thing I can think of that you can fix is to try and talk slower. Your speech made me realize how good we have it and why we should help other countries out. I can't wait to hear your next speech!

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  2. YouTube Videos:

    Jamie: https://youtu.be/9na9XTIIG1I

    Nathan: https://youtu.be/QcmxLB_cHwA

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    1. Jacob: https://youtu.be/kYEArF-tyXM

      Franny: https://youtu.be/htTdj1KI4U4

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  3. I think this speech was one of my better ones. It was a nice challenge for me to try to convey this information to everyone in the class as a lot of it is really abstract information. I think my eye contact was 50/50 on this speech though. This was due to not practicing enough before hand. I will have to start practicing more like 4 or 5 times for each speech instead of my usual 1, 2, or maybe 3. I'm quite surprised that this was in the time limit as each time I practiced it was only about 5 minutes in length even with my gesturing. I do hope everyone learned something interesting from my speech.

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    1. Nathan I really enjoyed your speech. I really liked the way you presented the whole thing. You made a kind of complex theme into really simple, yet, really informative as well, which was the point of the whole speech, so, nice job on that! Looking foward your next speech.

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    2. Nathan, your speech was very interesting. I did not know that much about neutron stars or black holes before i listened to your speech. I really liked your analogy when you talked about the weight and how compact a neutron star is. Your eye contact was really good. I do not know if you have practice a little more, I thought it was pretty good. Nice job Nathan.

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    3. Nathan, before you even picked this as your for sure topic, you showed me some interesting stuff about black holes and since I saw that you were interested, I knew that your speech would be great. For not being fully prepared (oops), you did really good. As confusing as neutron stars and black holes are, you simplified them fairly well. I really enjoyed your speech.

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    4. Nathan, I think you had good eye contact, and you did a good job using the laser pointer to help with your explanations. You really seemed to know a lot about your topic and your information was interesting. Your slides really helped me to understand your topic better. You did a good job, and it made me want to hear more!

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  4. I thought that this speech went fairly well for me. Without looking at the video I realized that my transitions weren't good at all and I had 1 or 2 longer pauses. My eye contact was fairly good since I remembered what to say most of the time. I was prepared for this speech because Nathan had helped me out and traded spots with me. Also he also listened to my speech beforehand so that was also a plus. I had gestures through out the speech. For the most part I was organized. I had written down stuff to remind me of what to say as well. Overall the past knowledge of my topic led me to want to learn more about Bigfoot, in which I did in my speech. I am still debating whether to have bigfoot in my persuasive speech as well, seeing the interest and motivation I have in finding out more about this creature.

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    1. Jacob, I loved your speech! I thought it was funny and at the same time interesting, to be fully honest I actually got really interested with the fact that big foot may or may not exist. At the beginning of your speech i thought it was just gonna be a funny speech, nothing serious, but you proved me wrong. Good job!

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    2. Jacob, loved your speech. I think your topic was very interesting. Your eye contact was pretty good. Your speech was also pretty funny. I do not think your pauses were that bad. Overall, really liked your speech. Nice job.

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    3. Jacob this was definitely one of my favorite speeches to listen to. You had such a great speech and I really enjoyed it! I think that you had a super strong intro and I loved your visual aid! Overall, I think this was your best speech. You improved with your eye contact and you seemed very comfortable. Overall, you did a fantastic job!

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    4. Jacob,you had good information to describe your topic. The orderly perspiration of your facts and research held my attention. The research you did regarding your topic helped me to get a picture of what Bigfoot might look like. This was a very interesting talk and you did a great job!

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    5. Jacob your speech was really fun to listen too! I learned some interesting facts about the legend of big foot. It was really cool to see some people's evidence they found regarding there sighting of big foot. You seemed really confident talking about the subject and talked at a good rate. Your hat was a good touch to your speech. Can't wait to hear your next speech! Keep up the good work!

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    6. Before you gave this speech, all I knew about Bigfoot was that he had big feet and was hairy. I didn't know that the yeti and Bigfoot were the same species or what they ate. I also was very surprised to hear just how many people believe they exist. I thoroughly enjoyed this speech and it kept my attention all throughout the speech. I loved the hat too. It was a funny and still relative visual aid!

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    7. Jacob, your speech was funny and interesting. I also have watched the tv show "Finding Bigfoot" so it was funny to see the references that you put in relating to the show. I think this worked well, but it may have confused people who have not seen the show. You really educated us on the topic of bigfoots and this topic took me by complete suprise. Good job :)

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  5. Overall, I think I did alright presenting this speech. This speech was really interesting and fun to plan because I learned some new things along the way about sleep. At first when we were told in class that this speech had to be over 6 minutes long I thought it was going to be hard to accomplish, but I was wrong because the time went by really fast. I think this speech was easy to write about because the topic interests me a lot. I thought I had a creative opening that caught everyone's attention. One major thing I need to work on is eye contact. I caught myself looking down at my paper a lot. During this speech I felt confident going up in front of the class and presenting my topic. Can't believe I only have a month left in this class!

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    1. Frances, I really enjoyed your speech. I thought that your opening with the alarm was a really good attention getter. It seemed like you had a lot of confidence up there and that was cool to see. I honestly thought that this was your best speech so far. I really enjoyed how you even did you own experiment for the speech. Next time I work on a little more eye contact, but other than that I thought it was excellent. I can't wait for you next one!

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    2. Franny, I really liked your speech. It definitely was informative! I think that you had a great tone and speed. You also sounded very knowledgeable on the subject so that really helped as well. I think that the little addition of your own study was a really great touch as well. I think you had good eye contact, but I think it has been better in other speeches. Overall, great job!

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    3. Franny, I really enjoyed your speech.You had good eye contact. Your speech held my attention,and it was easy to follow. It helped me understand more about how much sleep I need, and your speech gave me more information. I really liked your speech, you did a great job!

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    4. Franny you did a really nice job on your speech! I really enjoyed your speech! I liked how you started off with the alarm. That really grabbed people's attention. I thinned that you had a nice rate. I really liked how you did a little experiment and shared results. That really made what you were saying applicable in everyone's lives. You did a great job and I can't wait for your next speech!

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  6. I had mixed feelings about this speech. I enjoyed the topic and researching the slam dunk was interesting. I liked the idea of informing you guys about it. I thought that my information was pretty decent and it all made sense, but I didn't feel to great about how I presented it. I forced myself to give my speech with just notecards instead of a manuscript because I knew that I would look at the manuscript too much if I had it. I was pretty confident with what I wanted to say, but I felt like it just didn't flow right. Hopefully my remaining speeches will be better.

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    1. Henry, your speaking ability is definately getting better, but I think that you could have had a stronger topic. I did not feel engaged much and I feel that it is hard to inform people about a move in sports. For what you had you did really well, and I know your next speeches will be better.

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  7. Overall, I think that my speech was ok. I thought that my intro was good, and starting the speech out with a joke really helped me to relax. I tried my best to include the four parts of the intro, but I don't know if they transitioned well with each other. I thought that my conclusion wrapped up my main points and what I wanted to say nicely. I thought that my visual aid was good, but I felt awkward having to click on the computer. I thought that my hand gestures were not as good in this speech as in other speeches. I thought that my eye contact was good and so were my facial expressions. I am excited to present my next speech!

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    1. Grace! I really enjoyed your speech. You had a creative intro that really grabbed my attention. I think you had a good amount of information and you seemed well prepared and practiced. You did have good eye contact and and I think your rate was good as well! Can't wait to see your next speech!

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  8. Alright, I'm really disappointed at myself because of how my speech went. Not because of the information, or the topic, or just the way I said everything, but I'm disappointed at myself because of how much I extended myself and of course, if someone is just talking about the same thing over and over again for 16 minutes straight people are just gonna lose interest in the subject, therefore, stop paying attention and zoning out. I, myself, failed at keeping the attention and keeping it short and easy to digest. I'll have to work on that.

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    1. Pablo I actually really enjoyed your speech. Even though it was a little long, I barely noticed it because I was so intrigued. I honestly didn't lose I trest that much, so don't beat yourself up about it. I think on the information side you could've cut down or maybe had a more focused direction. Your speech was very interesting and really enlightening on what is happening in Venezuela. I look forward to your next speech.

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    2. The only thing I had against this speech was the length. I understand that you were talking about things that were very dear to you and it showed in the entire speech. I agree that towards the end you were losing some attention and that you should keep it short. You weren't talking about the same thing for 16 minutes, only the same general topic. Every slide was something different. I will say, though, that you needed to pick a slightly narrower topic and that you don't necessarily need every detail to make us understand. Only the really big details that will get our emotions stirring in the way your speech is going.

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  9. I thought that this speech went well for me. Even though China and America have many cultural differences I believe that they both are similar in the way that they are both disappearing cultures. I strongly believe that this is a serious problem. Throughout my speech I was hoping to persuade my audience to care about the disappearing of cultures in their country. Also, I think that during my speech I was not as persuasive as I would have liked to be. I should have spoken louder during my speech, but I will try to do a better job next time to make sure my audience can hear me clearer. I also needed to have better eye contact. Being better prepared and practicing often is my goal for next time.

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    1. Vicky, I think you did a good job. You were really well prepared and your analysis about Chinese culture was really precise. You did a lot of research on this topic and it was worthy. You should keep working on your grammar and pronunciation.

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    2. Your speech was very good. I also feel strongly about this topic and agree with you, and it was good to hear somebody else validate my ideas. I think you could work on being more assertive and grabbing the audiences attention. There were a few grammatical issues and I think it would help to have an American student or teacher proofread your manuscript. I would be happy to help if you would ever like to do this. Good job overall though!

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  10. I think my speech was okay. I definitely could have prepared and practiced more. I was really nervous but I don't think my voice quivered as much as it has in the past. I need to continue to work on slowing down and using pauses because I tend to talk really fast with out stopping. I think my information was pretty good as far as content but I don't think the topics flowed as nicely as they could've. It felt awkward having to click on the computer for the PowerPoint and I was bummed that it was hard to see. I am glad that I used notecards because it forced me to have eye contact, though that is something I can still improve on. I'm excited for our next speeches!

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    1. Cassie, I really enjoyed your speech. I could not tell that you were nervous at all. I thought your use of hand gestures were good like always. One thing that I think you need to work on is talking slower and maybe a little more eye contact. It really seemed that you were a professional about Starbucks. I am really glad that you chose that topic because it was really creative. Overall I really enjoyed your speech and cannot wait for the next one!

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    2. Cassie I thought your speech was very intriguing. I liked seeing the statistics across the country of the price of and average Starbucks drink. You did a good job with your hand gestures. I agree, you did talk a little fast but it could be hard fitting that much info in and trying not to miss anything. Overall I thought it was a well done speech

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    3. Cassie, I thought your speech went very well, even if you were a little unprepared. Your speech included some interesting facts and numbers and now I know so much more about Starbucks. I didn't think that I would really enjoy your speech because of your topic, but it was actually pretty easy to follow and listen to. Little things like eye contact can always use improvement, but you have definitely gotten better since the beginning of the year. Nice job.

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  11. I think my speech went pretty well. I think I practiced well. I was pretty nervous. I think every speech I am getting a little less nervous though. I think my speaking rate was pretty good. Maybe a little fast at times. I do not think I did too many gestures. I think my poise and confidence were pretty good. I think they are getting better every speech. I think I could work on my facial expressions a little more. I was well pretty well dressed. I think I might dress up a little more next time. Overall, i think my speech was pretty good. I think I am getting better everyone.

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    1. I was very confused why you were presenting your topic, which made me very interested. I never knew you were interested in that stuff. If you could see yourself from day one until now is such a big difference, keep working, your doing great.

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  12. I really enjoyed this speech. I think that my opening really grabbed the attention and I think that it really got to people on an emotional level. As far as the content of my speech I think that it was good but because I can do this stuff in my sleep, it is hard to tell how I actually did. I also think that I had a very strong conclusion, but I think that it could have been a tad bit longer. I think that overall this speech went very well. I tried really hard to have good eye contact but I honestly don't remember how I did with that. I really liked that we were able to choose how we prepared for this speech, because I felt that an outline was the best way for me to present this.

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    1. Amy! Your speeches keep getting better and better! I could tell you really liked giving this speech because you loved the topic so much. I liked how you started out with the letter, because it really set the tone for your speech. You had good eye contact, and your voice was solid. You also seemed very comfortable while giving the speech. Great job Amy!

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    2. I agree with Jamie! Your speeches do keep getting better and better! I could tell that you were really passionate about your topic and that showed through in your speech. I really like your introduction. It was a great attention getter. You did a nice job presenting all your information and I was engaged throughout the whole speech. You had good eye contact and seemed very well prepared. Nice job!

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    3. Amy, I really thought that you had a good speech. The topic was interesting and you obviously knew I lot about it. It was easy to stay engaged as a listener and I actually learned a lot. Good job overall.

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    4. Amy you did so good I thought this speech was really good and a awesome topic

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  13. I am do not believe I am wrong when I say this was probably one of my worsts speech. It felt a little off the whole time. I think it was a great topic for me but probably not a topic that everyone else can relate too. I think there could have been a little more work put into it and there are always room for improvements. Definitely something that I will learn from and try to get better at!

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    1. Eriq, I thought that your topic was pretty interesting, but then again I am also a pretty big sports fan. You are just naturally good at talking in front of people and it shows every time you present. I think that if you practice your speeches a little bit more you could give some of the best speeches in this class. I'm excited to see how you decide to do your persuasive speech and hope that you put a lot of effort into it.

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  14. I think really like giving informative speeches. For me, this speech was easier to format and present. I didn't like using a power point, though. I also felt because of the power point, my eye contact suffered. However, I think that the website that I used was a big help with keeping the audience focused on my speech. Also, I think because my topic was so different, that helped too.

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    1. Jamie, I really like your speech. I think this is one of your best speech. You were really confident and well prepared. I really like the topic, I didn’t know that there are so much things behind emoji, it was really interesting.

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    2. Jamie, I really enjoyed your informative speech. I could tell that you liked the speech because you seemed calm and confident as you spoke. Your powerpoint and website worked very well and helped make your speech that much more interesting. Keep up the good work and good luck with your future speeches.

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    3. Jamie, I enjoyed listening to your speech. I really liked it. This could be considered as one of your best speeches so far. You did an excellent job on your pace and your body languages. I was also attracted by the topic you shared with us. Well Done, and good luck on your next speech.

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    4. Your informative speech was really cool. I like how you incorporated the emoji counter website into your speech. This was very captivating and made me want to visit your topic further. Your delivery was strong and well rehearsed and I think it helped you out. You also did a good job choosing a topic we all are familiar with and presenting new information about it. Really good job :)

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  15. I think my speech was okay. The intro was really well put together. I felt confident with what I had to present. Within the body of my speech, I didn't really touch on what is actually does to your body. I mentioned a few things such as side affects or symptoms buy other than that I just listed facts. My presentation was well put together and I think A lot of it was attention grabbing. My conclusion was a little short and I didn't realize that my time would be less than the required amount. Overall, I think I did alright and it was a fun speech to do.

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    1. Kristen, I think that your speech was unique and well done. I didn't really know a whole lot about energy drinks other than they aren't really that good for you. Your speech opened my eyes about just how bad they actually are. You had a lot of good information and I think that actually bringing some drinks as props was a nice touch. You could still improve on little things like your conclusion or how long your speech is, but overall I think that it was a strong speech.

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  16. I think this speech of mine was just OK. I was the first speaker so I didn’t get much time to prepare. If got one more day this speech would be much better. I actually brought a MOOC certification to school so I can show it to the class, but I left it in the locker. I think my speed was a little fast, because I only have 8 minutes. If I had more time I can do a much better job.

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    1. Steven, I thought that your speech was pretty good for someone having to present first. Your topic was about something that I had never even heard of before. That made it easy to listen to because I didn't know anything about it. I thought you explained it well even if you didn't think you had enough time. I can tell that you you are getting better and I'm excited to see what you choose to talk about for your persuasive speech.

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    2. Steven, I thought that your speech was really interesting and I think you did a great job on it despite some small flaws as you mentioned yourself. However, I am glad you achieved so much in this lack of short period of time. Well Done, and good luck on your next speech.

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    3. Your speech was really cool to hear about this program. I thught it was really good

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  17. I think this speech went ok for me. I was able to get enough time to prepare for my speech. I got everything I needed. I think I prepared a interesting topic for the class to learn about. My pace was ok. The timing was just perfect as what I wanted it to be. Overall, I think I did fine, but I would love to achieve a higher level on my next speech.

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  18. I really enjoyed this speech. I thought this speech was so much fun to talk about and do. This was one of my favorite speech's because I can have talk about everything i did. Overall I thought I did good

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  19. I really enjoyed my informative speech. It was such a fun topic to talk about and educate people on and I think I had a really strong delivery. I wish it had been recorded so I could watch it back and see how I did. Since I was passionate about this topic and people had never heard about it I believe I was able to give a very accurate first impression of Banda. In addition to this it was one of the first speeches I really practiced and that helped my tremendously. This speech allowed me to talk about something that I'm very passionate about that I would normally keep to myself and I am thankful for that.

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