Thursday, May 19, 2016

Inspirational Speech

Write one well-written and thought-out paragraph. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upperclass students should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. 

You may comment on the following aspects as well: 
  1. Was the class inspired? How could you have been more inspirational?
  2. Eye Contact
  3. Nervousness
  4. Audience Feedback
  5. Preparation--did you practice enough? Too much?
  6. Speaking rate (too fast? too slow? too many pauses?)
  7. Gestures (Did you do any?)
  8. Poise and Presence 
  9. Organization
  10. Facial Expressions 
  11. Dressed and Groomed?
  12. Did you like your outline, notes or manuscript technique?

In addition, leave feedback for at least two students. Feedback should be specific and original

67 comments:

  1. This was my favorite speech. It was so easy for me because I knew what I wanted to talk about with the class. I think my eye contact was good and I was able to look up a lot more often from my manuscript. When I first got up there, I was fine but after my intro, I started to shake. I might have been thinking about the tear jerker near the end of my speech. I made sure that I spoke slowly and clearly because I wanted the class to understand what I was saying because this topic was very important to me. I feel like my speech flowed nicely and I got the point across. My conclusion however was a little iffy because it was short if I didn't include the Bible verse. Overall, I think I did great. I got a lot of compliments after my speech and it gave me a lot more confidence.

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    1. Kristen, I think that this was your best speech of the semester. Your speech was put together well and it all made a lot of sense. I thought that it was pretty cool how you referenced our middle school class song, it brought back some good memories. You seemed very poised and confident and your eye contact was pretty good too. Overall, I think that you nailed this speech!

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    2. Kristen, I think that this was your best speech of the semester. Your speech was put together well and it all made a lot of sense. I thought that it was pretty cool how you referenced our middle school class song, it brought back some good memories. You seemed very poised and confident and your eye contact was pretty good too. Overall, I think that you nailed this speech!

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    3. Kristen, I think you did a wonderful job on this speech. The topic was really inspiratinal. You seemed very calm and confident throughout the whole speech. Your pace was really good. Also you made a lot of eye contacts with your classmates which made this speech flawless. Overall, you did a wonderful job. And good job on nailing your last speech of the year.

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    4. Kristen, I think you did a wonderful job on this speech. The topic was really inspiratinal. You seemed very calm and confident throughout the whole speech. Your pace was really good. Also you made a lot of eye contacts with your classmates which made this speech flawless. Overall, you did a wonderful job. And good job on nailing your last speech of the year.

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    5. Kristen! I really enjoyed how you went out of the box on this speech and conducted a survey. I thought the idea was really neat and it caught my attention right away. It made me think about what kind of legacy I want to leave on people before I leave Martin Luther. You were very confident standing in front of the entire class. Adding the song, Blink, added a more personal touch to your speech. Overall, this was a great speech that we all can relate to!

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    6. Kristen! Of all of your speeches this is by far my absolute favorite! You seemed like you had everything well put together and that you practiced very hard. I think you picked such a great and relatable topic. You had a great speed and great eye contact. I really liked that you added blink because for me it really hit a personal "note". Overall, practicing almost all of our speeches together was super helpful and I'm very sad you won't be my practice buddy anymore but you have improved so much! Great work!

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    7. Kristen, I really like your speech. I can tell that you made a lot of progress during this year. I really like your topic and your opinion about life. you did a great job!

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    8. Kristen, you did an amazing job! I thought it was cool how you asked random people to do a survey. I thought that your eye contact was good, and I could tell that you practiced a ton. The song blink really helped me to connect more on your speech. The speech really inspired me to leave a lasting legacy at martin luther. Overall I think you did an awesome job and it was to watch you grow over the semester.

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    9. Kristen, I think you did a great job on your speech. Your performance was very natural and orderly start to finish. When I listened to your speech, I hoped I could give mine as well as you did Your body language and tone were very appealing to me. I liked your story; your speech was amazing. Actually, you had very good eye content.

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  3. I liked my speech, and I liked the topic that I picked. I thought that my eye contact for this speech was the worst that it has ever been. I was super nervous because I was really connected to this speech and I think that is why I had poor eye contact. To be honest I was not ready for this speech and so I was not confident while I was up at the podium. I think that I inspired the class to go out and make a best friend. I think that my speaking rate was good, but my hand gestures were not. Overall, This speech was a lot of fun and I wish I had taken more time on it.

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    1. Grace! I loved your topic and thought it was a very unique and special speech. By listening to you speak I could truly tell having a best friend means a lot to you. You had many accurate examples of times when having a best friend is great that we all could relate to. You have grown so much as a speaker throughout this semester. You are going to be such a great teacher after college (:

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    2. Grace, this was such a good speech! I thought your word choice was really perfect. I could also tell that you practiced for this speech a lot, because you delivered it flawlessly. You had great eye contact and the tone of your voice really fit your topic. And your speech was really inspirational because it made me think of my friends too!

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    3. Grace, I thought your speech went very well. the topic of having a best friend is definitely important to share. You may not have used all the time you could've on this speech but you still did fairly good. Your eye contact was good and your tone may have been a little shaky but it still fit with the message you wanted to say in the speech. Overall It was a good speech

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    4. Grace, I though your speech was so so so good! I loved the topic you chose and you really made your speech special. You had a lot of good examples and you really made me think about my best friend and how lucky I am. I thought your eye contact was fine and even though you maybe didn't feel confident, you looked it! Great job this semester!

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    5. Grace your speech was really good. Your topic for your speech is really good. Your eye contact was really good. Your examples were also really good. I could definitely tell that your practiced. I really enjoyed listening to your speeches over the semester. They have gotten better and better. Really nice job this semester.

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    6. Grace, I really liked your speech, and to be honest with you, it brought a little tear on my eye! Your speech reminded me of many memories I have with my best friend and so on. Great speech overall, eveything reall well done, your eye contact, your rate, your poise. Again, excellent job!

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  4. I didn't like my speech a lot, I liked the topic but I felt like I didn't do justice to it. I felt like it was a little bit forced and I just did not like my performance in general. I also felt like the eye contact was good. I felt that the structure of the whole speech was good, it was just the execution that i did not like. Without much to add, I feel like it was one of my worst speeches.

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    1. Pablo! I really liked the topic of your speech. You really got everyone's attention when you added a personal story to it. We can all relate to sometimes not being thankful for what our parents do for us. You maintained really good eye contact throughout the entire speech. You also had really good quotes that made sense with your topic. Nice job overall!

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    2. Pablo, I really liked your speech. I thought it was very well done. I did not think it was forced at all. I think your personal story was also really good. It tide in very well. Your eye contact was also really good. Your quotes were also really good. Nice job not quoting a terrorist. Overall, very well done.

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    3. Pablo, you did an amazing job on your speech. I thought your eye contact was great and I really enjoyed your personal story. The story definitely connected with me and made me think about all the sacrifices my parents have done for me. I thought that you looked very confident and had a nice poise when speaking. Overall I think you did a wonderful job and have definitely grown from all of your speeches.

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  5. I really enjoyed this speech. At first I had no clue what topic I should choose, but then the idea just hit me. I liked my topic because it was something that I am passionate about. I think my eye contact could've been improved and I spoke a little fast. I was pretty confident when I went to the podium so that helped my speech. Overall, I think that this was my best speech yet.

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  7. When we were fist assigned this speech I was not excited for it at all. I struggled to come up with any ideas and then it hit me. When I was in my room I saw my angel up on my door and instantly knew that's what I wanted to talk about. I felt like I maintained a constant speaking rate (for most of this speech). Overall, I feel like I was able to connect with people and i felt very comfortable talking to this group of people. I'm going to miss this class so much next year!

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    1. Franny! Your speech was such a sweet story! I really enjoyed hearing it. I thought you delivered your speech really well too. You had a good pace and the tone of your voice matched your speech very well. You have become such a good speaker this semester!

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    2. Franny I really enjoyed you speech topic. It was a lot of fun to hear something like this. The way you gave your speech was just awesome. I really liked your idea. Overall it was awesome

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    3. Franny I really liked your speech! It was really good! I learned something new about you and that was such an awesome story you told. You did a good job on eye contact and on your speaking rate! It has been so cool to see you grow and mature as a speaker this past semester! Nice job Franny! Love ya :)

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  8. Overall, I thought that this was a good last speech. I used a manuscript because that was what I was most comfortable using and it helped me remember everything I wanted to say. I thought that I had good content, but I didn't present it quite as well as I could have. My eye contact struggled a little bit. I can tell that I have gotten better over the semester. I'm very happy that the work that I put into this class has helped me to become a better speaker.

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    1. This was a great last speech, Henry! When you were done, I truly felt inspired! I could tell your eye contact was slightly lacking, but I can tell that is has improved greatly over the semester. I actually used a manuscript for the same reason because I didn't want to forget any details. You presented this speech very well and I'm sure anyone would agree with me. You will do amazing things with this skill, that you have learned, someday.

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    2. Henry you've become a awesome speaker. You always go up there with confidence and you know what you are talking about. I think when you used a manuscript you were more confident. It's been cool to see how you've improved.

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    3. Henry, your speech really good. I really enjoyed listening to it. I agree with you about the manuscript form of giving a speech. It seems to take a lot of stress of the speakers shoulders. Your eye contact was pretty good. Your overall presentation of this speech was very good. You have really become an awesome speaker. From your first speech to your last. There has been so much improvement.

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  9. I think my last speech went very well. I thought my eye contact and pace was good. The audience was a little bigger than normal but I was the most confident during this speech than all the other speeches. I think that the emotional portion of this topic made me very confidant. Thank you all for commenting and helping me become a better speaker.

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    1. Zack! I enjoyed your message so much! I think that you did such an excellent job with it! You had such great eye contact and you seemed incredibly comfortable which in turn helped your pace as well. I usually struggle to connect to the chapel messages but you made it so easy to connect to! I am going to miss listening to your speeches and after seeing your message I know you will be a fantastic pastor!

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    2. Zack, you are an amazing speaker. your message was awesome, not only did you prove one side but you also talked about the things that aren't always mentioned. your eye contact was good and you even used a bit of humor which was awesome. you looked so confident up there it was incredible. Way to go!

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    3. This was your best speech by far! This showed just how much you think outside the box but also how well you fit in the preaching position. The fact that you gave your speech not just to our 20 person class, but you gave it to the entire school was amazing and very well done! This was one of the best speeches I've heard all year and one of the best chapel messages I've heard all year. You will be an amazing pastor someday!

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    4. Zack you did such a great job in chapel! This was by far your best speech! You did a really nice job with eye contact, which is impressive because your audience was so much bigger than normal. You seemed super comfortable and confident on stage, which helped engage people in the message. You also made your speech something easy to connect to and pay attention too. Great job Zack! You are going to be a great pastor someday!

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    5. Zack, your speech was really good. I really liked to hear one of "us" in chapel. I think high school kids can understand a sermon when they can relate to the speaker. Your confidence was also really good in this speech. Your eye contact was also really good. When you get older and become a pastor, I will definitely come to one your sermons. Zack this speech was amazing and i am sad i will not see anymore of yours.

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    6. Zack, I thought that you did a great job on your chapel message. I was super impressed on how you were able to talk in front of the whole school. I cannot wait to hear you preach a sermon. I thought your eye contact and pace was very good. I could tell that you practiced by how confident you were. Overall I think that you did an amazing job and it was great to listen to all of your speeches this semester.

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  10. I thought this speech was very good because it was the most fun to write and talk about. I felt like this was one of my best speeches this year because of everything I learned over the year. I felt like my eye contact was really bad. But overall I thought this went very well. I wanted to say thank you to everyone for helping me improve over the semester. I hope everyone liked my speech.

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    1. Hey Tyler, I really enjoyed your speech. I feel like for once I got to see you open up and I got to see a different side of you. This was a very interesting change and you're brave for showing us this side of you. You presented well and I was impressed with how you did. One thing I think you could work on is keeping your speeches short and concise so you don't repeat yourself. Still a good job, one of your strongest speeches this year.

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    2. Tyler, I really liked this speech of yours. You obviously put a lot into it and it turned out really well. I think that you got a lot better over the semester. Nice job!

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    3. Tyler, you did an amazing job on your speech. I thought that your eye contact was good and you did a nice job on using pauses. I really liked how you showed us your emotional side and I was impressed that you were able to keep yourself together after you cried. Overall, I think you did a great job and this was one of your best speeches.

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  11. I think this was the easiest speech to give. At first I was really nervous that my topic wasn't going to be good enough. I wrote a manuscript this time, so I think that helped. I also kept practicing it while I was writing it. I also think that my eye contact and the clarity ofy voice were better this time. There were only six peoplease in the room, which is probably why I thought it was so easy.

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    1. I really loved your speech and I wish more people were there to hear it! You were so right about the lessons you and your family have learned and I was glad to hear a happy ended to a sad story. You seemed very confident, with good posture and a loud voice, and this was very encouraging to see from a quieter person. I think that you did everything correct and it came together into a very well rounded and strong speech. Good job :)

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    2. JAMIE YOUR SPEECH WAS SO GOOD! Even though I missed it in class, I watched your video and it was so great! I could really connect with your speech because I have some extended family problems too. Your eye contact was good and so was your rate. You did a really nice job! You have improved so much this semester and I've enjoyed listening to your speeches!

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    3. Jamie! Your speech was so amazing! I absolutely loved it, it was just so good in general, everything was really good. Your story kept my attention the whole time, your eye contact, everything was just so good. Your best speech this far!

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  12. I struggled with this speech at first because I honestly was getting frustrated that I couldn't think of a topic. I felt like everyone that went before me and have excellent speeches. However, once I got an idea I really felt like this speech went well. I think that I chose a really relatable topic and I think I portrayed it well. I believe that this was my best speech. The only downfall to this speech was that it ended up being so short. I think that it was because I talked so fast. Overall, I am really going to miss this class and presenting. It was a great speech to end with!

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  13. I liked this as being my last manuscript speech of the school year. My eye contact was alright and I didn't cry so thats always good. I did slur my speech a little but that was with the emotions and thoughts that were going on inside my head. This wasnt as fun as the informative but it still was fun while it lasted. I hope I can use the things I learned here well onto next year and the years after that

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    1. Jacob your speech was just awesome to hear about your family. I really liked the topic. This was one my favorite speeches done by you. You just did a awesome job

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  14. I am really happy with how I did on my speech. I think this was a strong note to end the year on, following a couple pretty weak speeches. My presentation was good, I wish I would've shown a little more enthusiasm like I had planned on and maybe given more eye contact. If I had practiced more and shown more confidence I think I could've taken this speech to the next level, but I still believe my speech was well received. I think my topic choice and overall idea was strong and people were able to connect to what I had to say.

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    1. Joseph, you did a really nice job on your speech! I really enjoyed your speech! I think you had good eye contact. You really seemed to know a lot about your topic and your information was interesting. I really liked your speech, you did a great job!

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    2. Joseph, you did a really nice job on your speech! I really enjoyed your speech! I think you had good eye contact. You really seemed to know a lot about your topic and your information was interesting. I really liked your speech, you did a great job!

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  15. I am really happy that this is my last speech before my final. I think I have learned a lot throughout this semester. However, I don't think I did too well on this speech. I wish I would make more eye contact throughout the speech and illustrate the speech better to all m classmates. But I think I still finished strong, and achieved my goal for this class. And I think my idea is very unique and very insipirational.

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    1. Kevin, I think you can do better in this speech. I know that you didn't have a lot of time to prepare for it. I think it is good that you talk about your family and your life experience, I always enjoy listen to that. I think you need more eye contact and a better ending for this speech.

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  16. I feel pretty good about this speech and how it turned out. I knew it was gonna be hard to follow up the amazing speech given by Eriq but I tried my best. And I thought I did great. I can see the progress from my first speech to this one and I can see how much better I've become.

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  17. I do not think this speech went very well. I had to change my speech topic the day before because my speech topic was taken. I was not as well prepared as I would have liked to be. I also should have had more eye contact. I think it is important though, that everyone should have nationalism. Realize how great our country is. Overall, this was not one of my better speeches but i have ome a long way from my first one.

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  18. I think this speech was pretty good. I took a lot of time to prepare and practice. I really like my topic and I want to talk about it for a long time. The only problem is that this speech is a little short, not even 4 minutes. I think the reason is I don't want this speech to be really long, I just want to keep it simple. I wish I could talk a little bit more in this last speech. But I really learned a lot in this class and it is really helpful for my speaking skill.

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    1. Steven, I think you did a great job on your speech.I liked your intro a lot as well, it kept my attention through the whole thing, it was a great attention getter. I thought you eye contact was very good and your voice was very clear. Overall this was a really good speech and it has been cool to watch you grow in your speeches this semester.

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  19. I thought that this speech went well for me. I spoke about what the meaning of life is. And I chose Jobs as an example of success. He was a great man because he used almost his whole life to make Apple Inc. During my speech I was not as persuasive as I would have liked to be. I should have spoken louder and clearer during the speech. I also needed to have better eye contact.

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