Monday, November 17, 2014

Persuasive/Convincing Speech

Leave the link to your video in a comment below. Then write one well-written and thought-out paragraph to reflect on your speech. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upper class students should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. 

You may comment on the following aspects as well: 
  1. Was the class persuaded? Do you feel you were persuasive or convincing enough?
  2. Eye contact
  3. Nervousness
  4. Preparation--did you practice enough? Too much? How many video takes did you have to do?
  5. Speaking rate (too fast? too slow? too many pauses?)
  6. Gestures (Did you do any?)
  7. Poise and presence accurately captured via video?
  8. Organization--did your speech have a natural organization structure?
  9. Facial expressions? 
  10. Dressed and groomed?
  11. Was the background appropriate and not distracting? 
  12. What would you change if you could do it all over again?



In addition, leave feedback for at least three students. Feedback should be specific and original. It should be obvious that you watched the entire video.

99 comments:

  1. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zNBowuS9W2c&list=UUgwuVIDnGm3S97ntELuaUxw
    I think this speech went all right! I was pretty prepared for this speech with a long outline, so I was able to make the time requirement. Honestly, I felt pretty passionate about this topic and I hope that was obvious in my speech! I also believe this topic can relate well with high schoolers. I stuttered a few times but I really tried my best to push past my mistakes! Additionally, I remembered to dress up for this speech so that's always a bonus! And I incorporated some visual aids as well.

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    1. I completely enjoyed your speech. I found the topic very interesting and I connected to it well. All the details you added were great and eye contact was good. You seemed confident and passionate doing this speech. Love the bow tie! Great job!

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    2. Your topic was relatable and your introduction caught my attention right away. You also seemed to have decent credibility. It is obvious that you did plenty of research. I liked your connection back to Martin Luther about the CEO running the double iron man. It was easy to relate to as this was a familiar subject. Nicely done!

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    3. I believe you did a lot of research for the speech. Your organization structure is clear.Your connection really attracts me. Your eye contact is well. However, you have some pauses, if you make more familiar with your manuscript, it would be better. Dressed nice, nice bow tie.Well Done!

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  2. http://youtu.be/fCTaVtn88Qc

    First of all, I did this one time, so thats good. Secondly, I think I did really well on this speech. I was able to stay on topic and follow the outline for a persuasive speech. I also incorporated sources and quotes which were beneficial in getting my opinion and points across. I feel that I did a good job with eye contact, although i probably could have spoken a little slower. Overall, I feel very passionate about the topic, although i would have rather had a two-sided discussion or debate than given a speech. But, in the end, I feel that my speech turned out great.

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    1. I thought your speech was quite interesting Andrew! I knew you'd be passionate about this topic right from the beginning, and you proved it in this speech! Your eye contact was very good and you delivered this speech well. Very rarely did you stumble on your words at all! I also felt very informed and persuaded at the end of the speech! I think this was a very effective and believable viewpoint on the topic. Nice job Andrew!

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    2. I loved the topic you chose. I am a huge political person and completely agree with the details in your speech. I connected to the speech completely. I make minimum wage and heck I would definitely not enjoy risking getting fired to make 2 more dollars an hour. The details you pulled off were spot on. Your eye contact, intro, and conclusion were great! Nice job.

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    3. You did pretty well on this speech. You seemed to be pretty informed and all your arguments didn't seemed to be fallacious or questionable. You also maintained some good eye contact, and you didn't stumble when you spoke. I disagree with your opinion, but a discussion of this nature isn't appropriate for now ;)

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    4. Your topic is really controversy and interesting nowadays. your arguments are clear enough to understand. Meanwhile, I realized that you took a lot of examples and statistics from some institution such as Forbs. It is persuasive. I like your eye contact and your speaking speed. Well Done!

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  3. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bVTkNAygZBI&feature=youtu.be

    I loved doing this speech. I am glad I basically did this in front of a camera without getting up in front of an audience. I felt smooth and confident through the entire speech. Eye contact was good because obviously I am looking at a camera. In addition, it was quite easy uploading the video. Also, I felt my introduction was pretty good. I hope everyone loves the speech. My topic is somewhat kid-like, but how can you not enjoy it?!?

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    1. Your speech was surprisingly convincing that peanut butter and jelly sandwiches are the superior sandwich choice. The introduction initially confused yet intrigued me. You made a great speech out of a very odd topic! That took a lot of creativity. You're eye contact was great and voice inflection kept the speech interesting and easier to listen to. Very good speech!

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    2. That was a pretty good speech, I was not expecting something like that it was a great way to lighten the mood after a few serious speeches. I seine toy enjoyed the topic and I thought your topic was on point, and you had good eye contact and volume!

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    3. This was probably the best speech I watched. You were very passionate and had an interesting topic even though I disagree. I liked your introduction.

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    4. Your speech topic surprised me. It was interesting. Peanut butter and jelly sandwiches was not my favorite choices , however, I decided to try more peanut butter and jelly sandwiches after I saw your speech. Well Done!

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  4. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xovC990p4Nc&list=UU4jdtvrGUi1CXCxaPSGH9gg

    I thought my intro was solid. I really like the facts I gave in it. My information was solid and I like the way it came out. My topic is something that I've enjoyed for a while. Space adventure is a large part of my life and seeing my idea actually come true would be amazing. I really like video taping my speech, I was able to restart my speech when I said something wrong or something I didn't like. I think I restarted just during my intro alone like 20 times.

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    1. I really enjoyed your topic you chose. Astronomical subjects I love and it really attached me to your speech. You had a stockpile of information and I felt you pointed them out well. Your introduction and conclusion were great and you had me interested the whole time. Great job!

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    2. You picked an interesting topic and had some good facts. Space has always interested me too. I also found it helpful to be able to start over whenever you needed.

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    3. Seth I really liked your speech your topic was very interesting and saying how people thought the moon was made of cheese was very funny

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    4. Although I was not really familiar with astronomy before, but I found that astronomy is interesting after I heard your speech with several interesting examples. Your eye contact is good although facial expression is a little strange. organization structure is clear. Well done!

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  5. This speech was alright. I think that I was almost less nervous in front of an audience. Constantly I had to remind myself to slow down and speak clearly. Despite my numerous failed attempts, I think that I came out with a decent product. Using the topic became difficult to expand on eventually. Just as I had a finished product of a speech, I rewatched the video and noticed I was not dressed up and had to redo the thing all over again. In the end, that was probably a benefit as it gave me another opportunity to practice it. All in all, this definitely was not my favorite speech, but I survived.

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    1. Video link: http://youtu.be/6QwW8COO8hg

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    2. I found your topic very interesting and intriguing. Drug testing students is a long, confusing idea on how it should be handled. I do believe more action should be taken towards it. However, I feel it would take a long time for something like this to occur. Great eye contact and speech!

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    3. I thought your speech was very well done. I thought you had really good eye contact and good volume, you just looked a little stiff in front of the camera, but overall really nice.

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    4. Drug test is required for students! I agree your idea. Your statistics data makes your point more convincing. Your eye contact and speaking speed is good. The speech is organized. Well done!

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  7. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y3XYMY4HtrI

    This is by far my least favorite speech, when I control the situation in which I give a speech my confidence is replaced with control and I can't get through a speech easily. I had poor eye contact and had trouble maintaining my theme I am just glad this is over with.

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    1. I honestly felt your speech was better than what your reflection said. I felt your eye contact was still solid and you had a lot of great information used. I found the topic you chose quite intriguing. Nice job.

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    2. I agree with Zach you need to give yourself a little more credit. I think this is one of your best speeches so far. You really seemed like you were confident and had everything well organized. Your eye contact was pretty good too. You seemed to know a lot about your topic and did a very good job. Keep up the good work Nick!

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    3. I agree that some prisoner rights do not make sense. Your examples and evidence are convincing. If you are more familiar with your transcript and improve your eye contact would be better. Well done!

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  8. https://www.youtube.com/edit?video_referrer=watch&video_id=zVZG1G15VI0
    Although I felt much more prepared for this speech and practiced plenty, I hate hearing my own voice. I struggled over every mistake and retried this speech way too many times. I was excited to do this topic, but found out that I had made it two minutes too short, then had to go back and find a filler. My eye contact was poor because I was using a manuscript and I was shivering because heating does not exist in my house. I also had difficulty finding a quiet place to present. I ended up giving in and allowing my mom's (loud) entrance to go in the video because I was so tired of starting over. Over all, a very frustrating video for a perfectionist... but at least I felt comfortable with my topic!

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    1. Great eye contact and pauses. You delivered this topic greatly and have given me more reasons not to use my phone while I drive.

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    2. Texting and driving has been a hot topic for many years. Students are more likely to do so while they are driving. I agree with your point. Your eye contact and speaking speed are good. Well done!

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  9. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5HzRbe7dkM8&feature=youtu.be
    I feel really strongly about my topic and I probably could've talked about it for hours but I had to condense and just hit the main points. This is probably my favorite way to give a speech because I'm not in front of everyone and I was wearing sweatpants. Hiding behind the computer screen was really helpful for staying relaxed. I think this was one of my stronger speeches. My eye contact was pretty good seeing as I just had to stare at the camera the whole time. I probably could've done more gestures and had a stronger conclusion but I'm thankful to be done.

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    1. I honestly was waiting for you to start laughing in the beginning. Your introduction was fantastically funny and suspenseful. I completely agree that the guy's restrooms are.......I cannot even comprehend. I do agree that more effort should be done to fix bathrooms. I enjoyed your speech a lot! Great job!

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    2. Alyssa this was really really really well thought out. You somehow are able to mix a humorous yet serious tone to this speech, which is awesome. You definitely made some really good points in this speech and I totally agree with them. Unlike some other longer videos on youtube, you were able to have my attention for the whole video!!

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    3. Haha I really liked this one! Your intro was pretty funny; injecting humor into a speech is always a good movie. I wholeheartedly agree with you on this topic, considering I'm a hypochondriac. In fact, you didn't even need to convince me: I saw the horror in the men's room myself. The stalls don't close in the women's room? Now that's just awful!

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    4. Alyssa,
      I truly enjoyed watching and listening to your speech. Though it was funny, you were very confident, passionate, had good information, and great eye contact. You also had gestures which I did not see in many speeches. One thing that you should work on for next time, is not going monotone, you don't do it the entire time, but it does happen and listeners can drift away from listening to you. In conclusion, your speech was very smooth, and it was very good!

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    5. Alyssa, I thought your speech was very unique and creative. It was very well thought of and I really liked it. It was an interesting topic which made it interesting. I also liked how you tied some humor into it. It really made me laugh. Good job alyssa.

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    6. I like your starting of the speech because it was interesting. Bathrooms of our school really should to be improved as you said.your speech is organized and detailed. You are confident while you are speaking. Well done!

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  10. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DwlUNmLvYaY&list=UUpxKpmME3jk8sxglW4gLNZQ

    Well, this was very difficult for me to do,mostly because it was torture to have to listen to my voice, in addition to that, it was also very difficult to figure out where to put my outline since I had to record my speech with an ipad. I also found it very awkward trying to handle a mic around, since my ipad mic had difficulties hearing me. I definitely prefer live audience speeches only because it is much less of a hassle, and I feel a lot more confident about those then I do about this speech. I feel that this speech was a complete disaster and with every re-do I felt it kept getting worse. I re-recorded this like 8 times and finally just gave up because I couldn't bare to hear my voice anymore. I hope that I wont have to to this any time soon, because, it was very challenging for me.

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    1. Your speech topic was very intriguing and I really liked your introduction that compared statistics to our speech class!! That made the speech very relatable. Also, your eye contact was solid and you remained animated despite the camera causing the appearance of boredom. Overall, your speech was great!

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    2. Chris I thought that your speech had a great topic and was very well spoken, well worded, and gave a huge amount of information on antidepressants.

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    3. Your topic is interesting. I think your speech is convincing because you used many persuasive examples and details. Your eye contact is solid and speaking speed is good. Well done!

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  11. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oOnLQVUpFvg&feature=youtu.be
    I felt okay with this speech, I use couple days to finish my manuscript, and I took five videos before I upload my video. I was a little nervous, it is different from other speeches. I think my background is ok. I dressed up for the speech but maybe no one can tell. my speaking rate maybe a little slow, and I did not use any gestures. I don't really have eye contact, I was looking at my computer screen throughout my speech.

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    1. Sherry,
      You had a interesting topic, and I enjoyed listening to your speech. During your speech you were very passionate, spoke at a good pace, and had good information, which occasionally credited the source. A few things that I think you should work on next time is gestures, eye contact, and some facial expressions. Other than that, great job on your speech!

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    2. This was a great topic, I learned a lot and sounds like studding abroad would be something cool to do. You have improved so much sense your first speech. Your English has become so much easier to understand and it almost sounds like a second language.

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    While I wasn't able to include everything I wanted to talk about I think I hit some of the most important things I wanted to talk about. My eye contact was good because of the way that I set up the camera. I think that this was one of my better speeches. There were some awkward pauses where I was looking for the right words but other than that I think it went well. At times the speech felt like a rant but I think it was organized well and showed my opinion well. I felt fairly comfortable in front of the camera and wouldn't mind doing it again.

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    1. Feistyy! I love the high tech mic! Very informative! I did already have the same point of view as you, but I still acknowledgd the points you made, and they were pretty good ones! Keep it up man, lets finish this speech class strong!

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    2. Feist first of all.... sweet mic haha. Also, your tone seems to fit with this important topic at hand. The graphics that you showed in the video actually were really helpful in painting a picture for this topic. I'd have to agree with you that sometimes people who are involved with mass shootings are wrongly assumed to be playing violent video games, and I think that the general public needs to see that there are other reasons to why someone would do these horrible crimes like a mental illness or depression. Sweet job.

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    3. Feist! I loved the Mic! I loved the graphics and you seemed very confident in what you were talking about. I agree with you. I dont think that just because there are violent video games crimes happen. I liked what you did. Right Idea

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    4. I agree with you 100%. Great topic, I have played video games that have contained guns I think sense I was about 8. I have never felt like killing anyone before too. Great eye contact and also love the mic too.

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    5. I agree with your idea that video games and violation have no relation. Because sometimes video games can relieve ones feeling on video games. As long as person control himself well, he will be fine. Your eye contact is solid and your speech is organized. Iike your diagram on the video screen. Well done!

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  13. http://youtu.be/hxGyMhYFWc4
    I actually really enjoyed this speech. I felt very relaxed, and felt no pressure because I didn't have to speak in front of everyone. That was relaxing. I feel like it went very well I am ready to hear the criticism!!!

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    1. Your speech was very strong and you looked really confident. Your purpose was very evident and you did a great job of getting your point across.

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    2. Very energetic as always! Very well done, Can't say much on the eye contact since it is recorded but everything was rock solid! Good job man!

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    3. Ohh I just love my helping-brah. Your tone and volume were spot on during this speech, and you were able to keep it interesting with your voice inflections. You probably could have tilted your phone to a better angle haha. Your hands seemed to be fine for the most part, but at times they were a little distracting. This was a pretty easy speech to follow, being a ball player and all, I agree with your viewpoints on the subject. Your speech flowed smoother than maple syrup going down the side of a maple tree.

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    4. You had a lot of energy durin your speech! It was very well done, I thought you knew a lot about your topic and you also appeared to be really relaxed and confident just like Alex said, Overall, nice job!

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    5. Max, I loved your speech. I couldn't agree with you more on your topic. Performance enhancing drugs are ruining professional sports. I loved all the energy you had and your vocal variations were great. You did look away a few times which was kind of distracting but it didn't take away from the main idea. Great job.

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    6. I am surprised at so much sport players do performance enhancing drugs.your speech is pervasive and organized. Your eye contact is really good. Your gesture distracted a little bit. Above all,Well done !

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  15. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8rwAQ5aiY28&list=UUjSK5j-Q338hspIbQkOWO2g
    It felt a lot different talking to myself alone in my room, but also more comftorable since I can try as many times as I want to get it right. I think i did fairly well on my info and the points I made to back up my main point. It was a little weird to make eyecontact with the tiny frontcam up my phone, but I did my best! I also think that its not as powerful to just move your eyes from your paper to the phone, compared to looking down at your paper in front of an audience, and looking up at them to make eye contact. Overall I am content with this speech and am looking forward to seeing everyone elses!

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    1. Drew, I was really impressed with this speech. I had never really thought about the gun free zone as being a challenge to criminals until now. I agree with your standpoint on the topic. It was very interesting and I do think that gun free zones should be gotten rid of. Your eye contact was pretty good all though I could tell that you were reading. Your tone really fit the seriousness of the topic and over-all your speech was very well done.

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    2. Gun free zone really is an interesting topic. Your examples like sandy hook shooting are attractive. Your speech is organized. Eyes contact and speaking speed are Good. Well done!

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  16. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dhI_lfMr4VE

    This is Anton here. I'm posting from a "professional" google account. Let's just say my normal youtube account has some... umm. crude humor in the favorites section. Anyway, I was extremely disappointed in this speech. This is because it was extremely blatant that I wasn't prepared, and that I rushed it the night it was due. This is disappointing because I had a plethora of information regarding my subject and the controversies surrounding it, but I couldn't adequately communicate them because of the pressure due to the webcam. I also repeatedly stumbled and froze up, which is never good in a speech.

    by the way, when I heard myself talk and saw myself on the video... IT WAS TERRIFYING, KILL IT WITH FIRE

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    1. Anton I think it would of helped if you practiced a few times before. You seemed to know what you were talking about and brought up some good points. I did not know a lot about this topic but now I am interested.

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  17. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KAZJt2_Lcc8&feature=youtu.be

    Making this video was certainly different than all the rest. I think by pushing it off to the last minute it was not as good as it could of been. There was plenty of information that found for this speech and that part was easy. The tough part was putting the facts together and making it flow. I think that if I spent more time writing the speech it could of flowed more smoothly. I was actually a little nervous for this speech because I has never done one like it. Watching myself on this video was weird too. Also hearing yourself talk is weird. It was hard to put any emotion into talking into a camera.

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    1. Matt,
      I completely agree with your topic. I sometimes wish that I was a little kid again just so that I wouldn't have to worry about technology and social media. You sounded extremely organized and confident but it was a bit difficult to see your face and eye contact. The lighting was a bit off, but otherwise a great speech.
      P.S. I agree with all the 'weird'ness of this speech.

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    2. Matt,
      Your topic is so true to society today, and I whole heartily agree with you. In your convincing speech, you had a great pace, really good information that greatly supported your topic, and you were able to get my attention right away. In your next speech I suggest working on adding gestures, eye contact, and facials. In total, your speech was put together very well, and it was very good.

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    3. I am agree with your idea. Social media drives us to keep look at phones which would distract us from study. Technology does really affect people's life. Your ideas and examples are concise. Your eye contact is good. Well done!

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  18. For my speech, I did a convincing speech, and I honestly think I this was one of my worst speeches. I am a perfectionist, so it was really hard to get through my speech at the end. In this speech I did my best to have eye contact and tried to slow my rate of talking at much at I could. I do not know why but I also had a lot of facial expressions in my video, which I thought was pretty funny to watch. It took me awhile to organize this speech, but in the end think it turned out pretty well. When I prepared for this speech I believe I practiced for a good number of time, and was pretty confident with it. The only thing I greatly messed up on was the turning in of the speech. I forgot that using my camera to record would cause youtube to upload about 1 gigabits of video. So instead of taking around two hours to upload the video has taken four hours and therefore its late.

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    1. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QGyUmdnf2Pk&feature=youtu.be

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    2. As a Chinese, I really agree with your topic, Chinese is become more and more popular in the world, and there are a lot foreigners goes to China too. For your speech, I think you look down to see your script in some parts, maybe needs a little more practice. Your speech is a great speech, I really enjoy listen to it.

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  19. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sCQ1b7Dzoo8

    For this speech, I decided to do a convincing topic as to why high school students should have part time jobs. The idea of recording myself alone was pretty foreign with me, and I can tell that my tone was a bit different. Once again, I was most comfortable with using a manuscript with this speech. I'm not exactly sure how my eye contact was, because I was pretty much reading my manuscript from straight off the computer screen. I was able to get a lot of information on this topic, and I think I explained it well. I don't think that my background was too distracting (my kitchen), and I think my volume was alright on this speech. In the end, I think that this was probably my most serious speech, but I think I was able to present a good case for my argument as to why high schoolers should have jobs.

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    1. It was very well spoken Mike n Ike. I really liked what you were doing. You definitely had the right idea. One spot of advice I have for you. I would have liked to see your beautiful smiling face a little bit more. Overall it was awesome. It was greasy like a big mac

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    2. I thought that your speech was very well done and your topic was aim directly for your audience and your comment about putting " I can party really hard" your resume was funny.

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    3. Michael,
      You were very passionate about this topic, had great eye contact, good facials, and a great pace. You also seemed very prepared, and had very good information from personal experience and etc. The only thing that I think you should work on is adding some gestures. Anyways, great conclusion and good job on this speech!

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    4. Your topic is attractive. It is obvious that you are well prepared for the speech because it is organized. If you improve your facial expression, it would be better. Above all, well done!

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  20. http://youtu.be/n7YIqglQXsc

    For this speech, I thought it went very well. Since I kept having to re-record myself I felt like that made me better going through it again and again. And every time I went through it again I could slow myself down a bit more. Also having the slideshow from my USANA guy really help with with the information that I needed. I'm about 30 seconds short at the end since i got too tired trying to keep adding more, and last week and this week have been extremely busy for me. Other than being a bit short, I believe that this speech went solid...and listening to my voice wasn't that bad.

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    1. I could tell that this is something that you truly believe in. Your confidence, organization and smoothness were top-notch, and I envy that you managed to keep eye contact the whole time (I struggled with that arrangement of manuscript vs. camera). The only thing that I would suggest is try adding a little more inflection in your voice. Extremely informational speech. Nice job!

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    2. I enjoyed listening to this speech a lot. I agree with you completely. You looked very passionate and confident. There wasn't much vocal variation in your speech though but that was probably the video's fault. This speech was delivered very well. Keep up the good work.

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    3. Jaycee,
      This was a interesting topic to me since I do not know much about this. In your speech, you had a good pace, were very passionate, and had very good information. Something I think you should work on is adding some gestures, and not falling into being monotone. Other than that, the speech was great!

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    4. It is obvious that you did a lot of research for the speech. A lot of examples and statistics data make your speech more persuasive. Your speech is strong and convincing. I agree with your idea too. Well done !

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  21. http://youtu.be/dIsIE5C5WnQ
    I did not like this speech at all. It felt very awkward just looking at a camera instead of an actual audience. I enjoyed my topic but not how I presented. I think my eye contact was good but I stumbled over a lot of words and had to start over more than I wanted to. Overall, I didn't like this speech at all and could've done much better.

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    1. Jordan, I really like the topic of your speech! I totally agree in how creativity isn't valued that much in the classroom and usually gets looked down upon. Being a creative person myself, I think is better when people look at things and express it in a different way. I feel you on the stumbling on some words since I had the same problem, but I feel you did just fine. Good job!

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    2. Really good speech, I like the topic. I am not a creative students, and I could never do any thing I like to do when I was in china. You have really good eye contact, and the speech is really convincing. In some parts your spoke a little slow, but still a really good speech.

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    3. Jordan,
      I completely agree with your topic, and I really loved your speech. In it you had great eye contact, facial expressions, and a good pace. I would suggest that next time you work on adding some gestures, and maybe practicing a bit more so you don't stumble. However, even if you do stumble don't apologize, just keep going. Other than that your speech was well put together, and you had some great examples of people who were creative.

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    4. it was good Jordan! Your voice is really good to listen to! It was a good topic, too. This thing happen to asian schools, a lot. It was an asian thing that everything student have been through

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  22. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q8X8Zk8lKY4

    I did not like this speech at all. I felt a little weird doing it in front of a camera, which added another element of change. I would much rather do a speech in front of people than in front of a camera. The only aspect that I didnt mind was that I wasnt the least bit nervous, I just turned it on and started talking. Although this was a day late I hope I did enough preparation, and I think I could have improved on the eye contact, it just felt weird looking into a camera lens. All in all, like I said this was by far my least favorite yet.

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    1. Ethan, I could definitely tell you were a little uncomfortable with the camera. You had some really good facts that supported your opinion. You seemed to be a little bored with your own topic but that might just be because it was filmed and not in person. Your eye contact was pretty good. I agree that America needs to do something about the obesity problem and exercise is the answer. Even though you didn't like this form of giving a speech it still turned out pretty nicely.

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    2. Your topic is interesting. But as you said, you looks do not like that speech and feels uncomfortable in front of the camera. If you can improve your facial expression, it would be better. Well done!

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    1. Mo,
      How do I begin? Um, on top of the fact that the speech was 5 minutes under the minimal time, it seemed like an extremely prejudiced topic for you. Although you were confident, the casualness and lack of preparation was a bit disheartening. You are a natural speaker, but I personally think that you just don't care enough to try for these speeches. Seeing as this is our second last speech, I will speak openly with the hope that you take the last speech more seriously. There were no facts, vulgar language used to describe other human beings, and you managed to turn me against your topic due to your delineation of your personal views.

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    2. Mo, I do think this wasn't one of your best speeches. It was way too short and there were not many facts incorporated into your speech. I also do not agree with your statement that some Mexicans are just here to take our jobs. However, you seemed very confident in yourself and very passionate about your topic.

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  24. http://youtu.be/cyetwxt9kdU

    I really hate this speech of mine. It's not really good with my voice that day. the concept of the speech is broad so it pretty hard to tell everything.

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    1. I agree with you that the real book is much better than e book. Your examples and reasons are concise. Your eye contact and speaking speed are good. I like your speech. Well done!

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  25. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qLqEgY7g3jg

    I believe my speech was persuasive enough to at least make people think about doing what I told them to do. I also believe my confidence was high on this speech, due to it being in the comfort of my own home and being able to redo the speech whenever I made a mistake. My eye contact was as good as can be in this video taped speech, and I also believe my gestures were not as good as others, mainly because I was video taping myself by holding a phone camera in front of my face, so I wasn't able to show my whole body.

    Alyssa: Your intro was very funny. You seemed to have a lot of confidence and you also seemed to enjoy convincing people to clean bathrooms

    Ethan: This speech was very informative, the facts you talked about were all positive causing this to be a good convincing speech towards exercise.

    Jordan: I believe your speech is one of my favorites. There is truth to what you said and I also believe that teachers need to see this speech in order to understand students.

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    1. I agree with your idea that brush teeth is important. Dentists give us a lot of suggestions.everyone of us should learn how to protect our teeth.Your eye contact is good. And your speech is organized . Well done!

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