Wednesday, May 11, 2016

Persuasive/Convincing Speech

Leave the link to your video in a comment below by 11:59 p.m. 5/17/16. Then write one well-written and thought-out paragraph to reflect on your speech. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upper class students should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. 

You may comment on the following aspects as well: 
  1. Was the class persuaded? Do you feel you were persuasive or convincing enough?
  2. Eye contact
  3. Nervousness
  4. Preparation--did you practice enough? Too much? How many video takes did you have to do?
  5. Speaking rate (too fast? too slow? too many pauses?)
  6. Gestures (Did you do any?)
  7. Poise and presence accurately captured via video?
  8. Organization--did your speech have a natural organization structure?
  9. Facial expressions? 
  10. Dressed and groomed?
  11. Was the background appropriate and not distracting? 
  12. What would you change if you could do it all over again?

In addition, leave feedback for at least three students. Feedback should be specific and original. It should be obvious that you watched the entire video. Feedback is due May 22. 

65 comments:

  1. https://youtu.be/ROa2x5DrjVM
    After 20 hours of trying to upload my speech it finally worked!! This speech has been very stressful. I apologize for the giant watermark across my face ( I didn't know that was going to happen). Besides lacking in my technology skills, I thought this speech was a good learning experience. It required a lot of work outside of the classroom. Overall, i liked how my speech turned out. I believe strongly that all students should play a sport. I hope I was able to persuade you to play a sport.

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    2. Franny, I really enjoyed your speech. You spoke very slowly and clearly. I also thought that your eye contact was very good, and that used appropriate word choice for everything that you said. Your statistics about the most popular sports between girls and boys really helped illustrate your point. I also thought your examples from your sports experiences gave your speech a personal touch. Great job Franny!

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    3. Franny, I really like your speech. Your voice is loud and clearly.I can tell that you really learned a lot of stuff by play sports. You gave so many good reasons and benefits for play sports. I agree with you in this speech. I play tennis in school and it really changed my life. I made a lot of friends on the tennis team and it made me a better person. Overall this is a good speech. Good job!

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    4. Frances, I really was amazed by your speech. I thought you eye contact was very good and your voice was very clear. The one thing I would say is maybe talk a little faster because sometimes personally it was a little too slow. I really like all your examples that you used I really connected to them because I play high school sports. Overall this was a really good speech and it has been cool to watch you grow in your speeches this semester.

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    5. Well those 20 hours paid off! Yes the watermark was a little distracting but after the first few seconds I barely noticed at all. I also liked your topic. I agree that everyone should do some sort of physical activity like sports and that they should continue in college even if its just an intramural. I hope that you learned how to work with computers a little better from this speech as well.

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    6. Franny, I thought you did good in your speech. Yes, the watermark was distracting but you spoke slowly and clearly. I agree that more people should try sports. And that mistakes ARE ok. Overall you did really good job

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  2. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XQ1gS3rxRHc
    I really like this speech. This is something I want to talk about for a long time. I spend a long time to prepare it and I think it went out pretty good. One problem is that I don't have much eye contact because there are lots of stuff om my manuscript. This video supposes to be 720p, but youtube automatically converts this to low quality. But you can still hear me. I hope you like it!

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    1. Steven, I think you did a great job on your speech.I liked your intro a lot as well, it kept my attention through the whole thing, it was a great attention getter. I thought you eye contact was very good and your voice was very clear. Overall this was a really good speech and it has been cool to watch you grow in your speeches this semester.

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    2. I feel like this was one of your best speeches! Everything was nice and clear and your eye contact was very good! I always look forward to your speeches, Steven, because of how well done they are! Not a single speech has been a let-down. I hope that this benefits you in life and that you go on to be a great speaker in the world!

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  3. https://youtu.be/GSaKZ3R1ar8

    I hated this speech with every atom in my body. I went through about four different ideas before Pablo inspired me to choose this. I know its quite a bit longer than it was supposed to be and I cut it as much as I could but I couldn't figure out what to summarize any more. I also know that my eye contact wasn't the greatest as I looked at my notes 50% of the time. I do believe that my topic can seem boring and it seems like it drags on but I ask you to just listen and I hope you agree.

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    1. Nathan! I really enjoyed your speech! I'm glad I inspired you to do this subject! Really good information and really well explained. The Winston Churchill quote left me thinking! In my opinion you had good eye contact overall. Really nice job!

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    2. Nathan, I really enjoyed watching your speech. I agree with what you are saying about capitalism. How it is not a perfect system but it is the only one that works because of human nature. I honestly did not notice the time, it was interesting. I think your eye contact was pretty good. Overall, your speech was really good and I cannot wait for your next one.

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    3. Nathan. Your speech was awesome. Capitalism is key. I thought your eye contact was good for the most part. And you spoke slowly and also clearly which is perfect. You didn't ramble too much but for a bit of the speech I was a little confused. Overall a good speech

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  4. https://youtu.be/1kvsE5SNpVs
    I hated this speech so much. I decided to use a manuscript this time, and even though I did better than the first time, I could still tell that eye contact was hard. It also took me forever to film. I also had really bad allergies, but that was something I couldn't control. On top of that, I really hate looking at myself through a camera. I felt uncomfortable.

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    1. Jamie, I thought that your speech was very interesting. I had never heard of explosive targets before I listened to your speech. You explained what they are and how they are used very well and also made it clear what you thought about them. I think that choosing something that people might not know very well was a good choice. Your eye contact could have been better like you said, but besides that your speech was good.

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    2. Jamie, I really like this speech. The quality of the video is really good and your voice is very clear. I agree with you on this topic. I also think is stupid and dangerous for everyone to play with explosives, especially for kids. You have some very good statistic data and I know you did a lot of research. I think this speech of yours is very inspiring. Good job!

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    3. Jamie, i really enjoyed your speech. I agreed on eveything with you, explosives like this should get regulated as soon as possible! It is not acceptable how easy it is to get it! This opens the door for many dangerous things that bad people could do any day. But changing subjects, one thing, and as you said, try to work a little bit on the eye contact, but overall very nice job!

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    4. Jamie, I really enjoyed your speech. This was a topic that I knew very little about so it was a big eye-opener to me. You seemed like you knew a lot about the topic and I could tell it was well researched. The amount of information you provided was a very good amount, it wasn't to much or too little. The video quality was good and your background was good because it wasn't distracting. You kept your speech interesting! I also agree that you could work on your eye contact, but overall really well done.

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    5. Jamie, I think you did a really good job. Your speech skill has improved a lot since the beginning of the year. You are much more confidence now. The way you talked about your topic was really logical and appropriate, and your voice was really loud and clear.

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  5. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IFtQy93b5oo

    This speech was a love/hate relationship with me, I kind of enjoyed the fact that I had to record myself and work a lot on it outside of the classroom. But on the other hand I also absolutely hated the recording part, first of all my phone stopped recording at the 4:30 minute mark and I had to record it on two pieces, that's why there is a slight cut towards the end of the video. Without much to add, I enjoyed this speech.

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    1. I enjoyed the humor of your speech and agreed with the overall points you made. You used good facial expressions and movements. Your ending was strong with the use of a thought provoking quote. I liked how you pushed through any mistakes you made instead of pausing or cutting to a new frame. Good job overall.

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    2. Pablo, I love your speech. You really did a good job. I totally agree with you. I also think that travel is important for people, it can help them to widen their vision and have a better understanding of the world and the people live in there. I love the quote you used at the end, life incomplete without traveling. If one day you are coming to China, let me know and I will take you to have some fun!

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    3. Pablo, I think you did a great job on this speech. I have always enjoyed listening to your speech. You always add a little sense of humor in your speech which made it flawless, I think you did a wonderful to keep everyone's attention on every speech you gave so far. This one is a different form of speech, but I think you still nailed it. And the quote you used in the speech was just amazing which finished your speech so strong. Overall, Well Done.

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    4. Pablo,I think you did a great job on your speech. Your performance was very natural and orderly start to finish. When I listened to your speech, I hoped I could give mine as well as you did Your body language and tone were very appealing to me. I liked your story; your speech was amazing. Actually, you had very good eye content.

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    5. Pablo! Your intro was very very funny and it caught my attention right away. I liked how you were funny at the appropriate times and serious at other times. This makes me want to travel somewhere out of the country now. I definitely agree with your main points. You made great use of facial expressions and eye contact throughout the entire speech. Your quote at the end tied in your key message extremely well.

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    6. Pablo, I loved your intro, your speech overall was good too. You used humor which was awesome. Even though the camera shook a little bit, I thought it was a well done speech. You made some good points through out your speech which got me thinking. The tone of your voice also fit your topic and also with your facial expressions. Overall good speech.

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  6. https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=N97tbdakob8
    I really did not like this speech. I'm not very good with technology so that was frustrating for me. I took me forever to film and I kept messing up. That's why I decided to just put the pieces together. I think my eye contact was pretty good. It was really hard for me to pace myself because when I talk normally I talk fast, so because I was by myself it was hard to regulate This is Definately my worst speech. I look forward to our inspirational speech and finishing out the year strong!

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    1. Cassie, I thought that you did a very good job with this speech. I thought that it was going to be about adopting rather than hosting a child so your topic actually surprised me a little bit. You explained the process of hosting very well and you were very informative. The emotion you used in the speech worked really well and your tone helped too. I thought that your eye contact was good and your pace was alright. Overall, I thought that this was a pretty good speech, even if you didn't think so.

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    2. Cassie! Your personal touch on this speech was perfect. Also, your information about children that don't get adopted was very sad. But I think you had really good eye contact, because you weren't looking at your paper. Also, the tone and pace of your voice helped communicate the point of your speech very nicely. And the website at the end was very professional.

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    3. Cassie, This was a wonderful speech. Your voice was very convincing and it made me want to host a child. Your pace was really good and it was not to slow, but not to fast. Honestly, I thought that this was your best speech. I really liked your intro and your eye contact was really good. I was really impressed keep up the good work!

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  7. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JBR8LKmm9HQ&feature=youtu.be

    I was not a big fan of this speech. I thought that I picked a pretty good topic and I had some good information about it, but I just couldn't come up with a way to present it that felt quite right. I didn't really enjoy recording it and I felt like it would take me forever if I tried to make it perfect. I eventually decided to just go with what I had and uploaded that. My eye contact wasn't great and I stuttered a stopped a bit throughout my speech. I'm looking forward to moving past this speech.

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    1. Henry, I really liked the topic that you chose. I totally agree that getting a summer job would be super beneficial. I could tell that you had a lot of solid information about your topic and you made me want to go and apply for a job right now! I think that you could work on your eye contact a little bit. You had a pretty good pace, it wasn't too fast or too slow. Overall, I enjoyed this speech and I look forwar to your next one.

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    2. Henry, your topic was pretty interesting. I agree with you, that recording it is not my most favorite way. I think your eye contact was pretty good. The tone and pace of your voice was also pretty good. I think you might have inspired me to get a summer job. I think it is good to keep me busy, like you said. I think your speech was really good.

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    3. I definitely think having a job as a high school student is a very important learning experience. I agree with the fact that you should learn to take on responsibilities at a young age. I learned some new things while listening to your speech. One thing that you could fix is having more eye contact with the camera. You had a steady speaking rate. Good job!!

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  8. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yKvDIR_XSiU
    I really did not like this speech at all I am very bad with technology and I hate the way I had to write this. But it was really fun to find info and other cool info on my topic. But I hated the style. I to look forward looking to finish the year out strong. But my eye contact was so bad in this speech I hate looking at a camera for this I like to look at my audience. Overall this was my worst speech ever

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    1. Even though I disagreed with your viewpoint overall, I think you did a really good job of expressing your beliefs from a unbiased point of view. You used statistics and evidences well to help prove your points and I think you did a good job. I think you could work a bit on eye contact and keeping your points concise so you don't end up rambling. I think this was a good speech overall.

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  9. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OmQVmtr7F3Y&feature=youtu.be
    I did not actually mind doing this speech. At first I was a little worried about filming myself and stuff. It was not too bad. I also learned many things about chocolate when researching my speech. In this speech I do not think my eye contact was as good as I thought it should have been. I really like using the manuscript but I might need to change to a different type. I think it will help my eye contact. I did stutter a little which was not very good. By doing this, I can definitely see that I improved a lot from my first speech. Overall, this speech was not too bad.

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    1. Josh, I really liked your speech. You had an intriguing intro and I was a little surprised at first when you said that chocolate was good for you. It was very easy to listen to your speech because you had an interesting topic and you were very enthusiastic. I agree that your eye contact was not great, I had the same problem with my speech. I can tell that you are definitely getting better and I can't wait to hear your last speech.

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    2. Josh, I really enjoyed your speech! I thought that your quote was really funny and it made the intro very good. I could tell that your really like the topic because of the energy in your voice. I thought that your eye contact was ok, but it was not horrible. I thought that this was your best speech and I can't wait to hear your last one.

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  10. https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=rfolttLtk3k
    I did not enjoy doing this speech but I made myself kind of enjoy it. I learned a lot of my topic and it made me think a lot about it. I felt that my eye contact is at its peak right now. I felt comfortable making eye contact. I feel pretty confident doing this speech and I see the improvement since the first speech. Overall I did not like this speech at all, but it was tolerable.

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  11. https://youtu.be/SKIEcvW8Olo
    I did not like this speech! I thought that my topic was pretty good and that I used a persuasive tone when speaking. I thought that my eye contact was not as good this speech. I think it was bad because I knew I could make it perfect and I was worried about messing up. I ended up redoing the speech so many times that during the speech I started to have an asthma attack. That is why there are many long pauses and my breathing sounds weird. I thought that my hand gestures were good and my background was not distracting. If I did this speech again I would figure out how to edit videos so that I would not have to do the speech over and over again. Overall this was definitely not my best speech.

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    1. I think this speech was one of the best speeches for this round. I could tell that it was really thought out, and you had a lot of information. I also like how you talked about how later start times would benefit all schools, but used Martin Luther as an example. The side effects that you listed were very surprising and very convincing. You also had very good pace while speaking. Nice work Grace!

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    2. Grace! I really liked your speech and I completely agree with you! My old school used to start at 6:50 so i had to wake at 5:45 every single day just to get ready and eat just to get there at 6:30. But that is still unacceptable. I'm pretty sure that if school started a little bit later it would be beneficial to eveyone. Really nice job on the speech overall!

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    3. GRAAAACCEEE! Nice job! Your speech was very well done! I totally agree with you on this topic because I know what it's like o live far away. I agree with Jamie that this is one of the best speeches for the round. Your speech was well thought out and you had a lot of information on the topic. I also liked how you showed both sides of the point very clearly. Overall, really nicely done! Keep up the good work!

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    4. Nice speech Grace! I 100% agree that we should start school early. I think your eye contact was pretty good. I did not notice that many long pauses. I could not imagine doing a speech while have an asthma attack. I know starting school later would be very expensive but I think it is worth it. If it improves grades and decreases obesity and many other things. Like you said. Overall, I thought your speech was very good. I

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  12. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=foapjYwsXOM
    To be honest I am not really sure how I felt about this speech. It seemed like a great fun idea and exciting but when I started it felt weird to me talking to people I could not see. Other than that it was okay and I had a fun time making it. I can not wait to see other peoples videos because this was a cool speech. I think keeping eye contact with the camera was kind of weird as well but other than that it was fun!

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    1. I think that your speech was very creative and interesting with the use of editing and video filters. It was very fun and had a strong overall theme. I agree with your points you made and am glad you presented them in a nontraditional way. Maybe next time you can use a tripod? Good job!

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    2. Eriq, I think this is your best speech so far. You definitely did a great job to get my attention through your long speech. I found the topic very interesting and great work on editing the video to a whole new level with those filters. I am very happy to see you improving throughout the year. You definitely went very strong on this speech. There is one thing you need to fix in this speech is the angle of your camera, it felt like your eye contact was not right.Other than that, you aced it. Well Done.

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    3. Your speech was defiantly very creative! Your rate of speaking was the perfect speed for this speech to get your point across clearly. The editing was a good touch to this speech and the various filters were a funny surprise. I agree with your ending sentence, "The saddest thing in the world is a wasted talent."

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  13. https://www.youtube.com/watch?edit=vd&v=NY6QbuCzEuM
    I agree with Eriq. It was really strange recording myself and talking to a camera instead of an actual audience. I decided to record outside because my family does not know when to be quiet. I felt weird because most of my neighborhood was outside. I don't like getting judged by people I don't really know. It was really stressing me out. It might have been a bad idea to record outside because of all the background noises I was hearing as well as so many distractions around me. This also took many takes. I could not go through the whole thing without messing up somehow. Within the actual video, I think my eye contact was pretty good. I did end up having a manuscript and I was a little upset when I saw the paper on the screen. My editing skills are not the best but I did try my hardest to make it flow and seem really good. Overall, not my favorite speech but it did help me with speaking to a camera.

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    1. Kristen, I think you did really well on this speech! I think you did a good job cutting and putting the different parts together. I also think you had a really good speed. Your eye contact could have improved but I think you did good given it had to be recorded. I think that the music was a great addition, but there was one part where it got a little to loud and it became hard to hear you. I also think you had a great background as it wasn't distracting at all! Overall, I think you did a great job on this speech!

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  14. http://youtu.be/cml9yEwnyGE

    To be honest I really did not enjoy this speech. Having to record myself was very stressful and I did not like having to retake it a thousand times because nothing felt good enough. I am constantly skyping with people for the dog rescue and I feel as though that is a completely different experience. I think that my eye contact was really bad because it is very awkward to look at yourself. I honestly don't know how my speech flowed together because I am always to hard on myself and I think that every speech I do is terrible. Overall, at least I got it done!

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  15. https://youtu.be/fUExxuelgvA
    I thought that this speech went pretty well for me. I talked about the significance of planting trees. As we all know, there are many people who do not care about trees. I hope everyone can plant their own tree because trees can clean the air and beautify the environment for our city. As for my presentation, I think I was lacking in eye contact and needed to speak louder during my speech. Anyway, I hope I showed some improvements from my last speech.

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    1. Vicky, I think you did a excellent job. It is definitely an interesting topic to talk about. It is good to raise the awearness of this environmental problem and let people realize how important trees will affect in our life. You just need to work on a little bit more on your eye contact. Overall, you did a wonderful job. Keep up the good work, Vicky

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  16. https://youtu.be/4QfTVfXMvNg
    Honestly I struggled during this speech because it is hard to not mess up. I had to restart speaking about 30 times because of a few slight errors. I also realized that speaking on camera feels like you have to say stuff longer than at your audience to meet your time frame. All and all this was one of my most difficult speech's.

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    1. Austin, I thought that your speech was pretty interesting. I follow the NBA so I am familiar with how much the players get paid and it does seem like a ridiculous amount. I thought that you explained your opinion pretty well and it made sense. You could of spoken a little louder and your eye contact could improve. Overall, good content, but your presenting still could use some work.

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  17. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0U2ZVvTQ_Es
    I Really disliked this speech to be honest. I practiced and practiced and practiced and I just couldn't get my speech up to 6 minutes i could only get the 4 minute range and id be rambling for a bit. I think my speech wasn't as prepared as others and I wish I would've spent more time on this

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  18. https://youtu.be/XjDkYGNqZro
    I have had the most exhausting week of my life. I finally got time to do it last night and I started uploading it around 11 pm, during the uploading time, I fell asleep. That is why this was not put up until the day after the due date. I really hated this speech. It was so rushed and so chopy. I look like I am high in the video because it was super late and the computer screen light was blinding me. I wrote the speech and practiced in the matter of two hours. I feel like my pace was ok, but just like any other computer assignment, there are always problems. The sound quality was terrible so I took another hour trying to fix that. Over all my worst speech, plain and simple. I like talking to people not to cameras.

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    1. Zack, I actually really enjoyed your speech. Even though you were tired, I would not have known! You always have a natural energy to your voice and I think that it helped you out a lot. I also think that your constant gestures helped as well. You seemed very natural when giving your speech. My only downfall I would say for you (and I'm not sure if it's just my computer) is that your sound quality was very bad and made it very hard to hear you. It almost sounds like you were in a tube! Overall, I think you were to hard on yourself and you did a good job!

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    2. This was not a bad speech, Zack. It was an interesting topic and I enjoyed it. A tip for any other video projects you have later in life; If the sound isn't great, don't worry. The sound can always be fixed by the listener by turning up the sound or fixing their settings. I just put some headphones on and turned up the sound. You also don't look terrible or high. You actually look quite awake and alert. The only thing that bugged me was that red shelf on the side. It was slightly distracting for the first minute as it didn't fit the rest of the background in the video. I will agree, though, you are better at talking to people rather than cameras.

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  19. Joseph: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=42NfqnwcWRM

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    1. I really hated the format of this speech and my performance. I was unable to memorize my lines and ended up just reading off of the page. It felt very unnatural and the end product is just plain awkward. If I wouldn't have had access to editing software this speech would have been a complete disaster.

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    2. Joseph, I think you choose a really great and interesting topic! I think that you executed it very well also. You had very good eye contact and a good non-distracting background. However, I noticed that every once and a while you would sway in your chair and that could be distracting as well. I also think that your speed was a little fast. Overall, I still think that you had a well delivered speech and that you did a good job!

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  20. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hYwB8Qw8SOo
    Hello again. I personally didn't like this speech so much. I stayed with my topic but there wasn't enough about it that I was even close to stretching it to 6 minutes. I think if I could do this again I'd choose a topic a little more fun and enjoyable. My eye contact was alright I think I should've spoken a little louder an clearer. Im sorry that Its late.

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